Guest Sebastian_the_Bastard Posted July 18, 2002 Report Posted July 18, 2002 I hope this is the right forum for this... I Just Stopped Caring I don’t know what to do I don’t know how I feel towards you I don’t know what is going through my mind I don’t know if things will work out this time I think I messed up things between us But I don’t feel bad about it It’s not like I did it on purpose But I don’t care to try to fix it Today you told me it’s over And I did nothing more than smile It’s almost like I’d been waiting for those words For quite a while I still remember the hurt in your voice And the tears in your eyes It’s like you thought the sun had set forever Never again to rise But let me assure you, baby, The sun will rise again And when you realize this You’ll be much happier in the end December 17, 2001 What do you fellas think? I love you all, Sebastian the Bastard
Guest Flyboy Posted July 18, 2002 Report Posted July 18, 2002 *sniff* That was incredible, man... I'll post one of mine I've written in a bit.
Guest Flyboy Posted July 18, 2002 Report Posted July 18, 2002 Some Day Some days I think what it’ll be like to touch you. Some days I think what it’ll be like to kiss you. The days I think to myself enter my mind in a flood. Without you with me, my body feels dead. I would do anything for you, if only you make this dream come true. Our love would be true, and I wouldn’t do anything to harm you. The way I look at you, you never notice. The things I say to you, you’ll never understand. You’re a big woman, that’s hurting a man. How do you do what you to do me, I really don’t know. Maybe one day I’ll get the courage to you ask you to be mine. Some days I feel ill, but somehow you give me the will. As I wake up and think to myself, "Is this that day?" "Or is this just another some day?" ----- My first poem I've ever written and probably my last because it sucked so much.
Guest Sebastian_the_Bastard Posted July 18, 2002 Report Posted July 18, 2002 That wasn't bad at all, Flyboy. Really good ending in my opinion. And some lines were really good (The way I look at you, you never notice. - The things I say to you, you’ll never understand. ~ for some reason I like that one). You should continue. And I'm glad you like mine :-D I love you all, Sebastian the Bastard
Guest The Son of Sting Posted July 18, 2002 Report Posted July 18, 2002 Well done guys those were pretty dam good.
Guest Flyboy Posted July 18, 2002 Report Posted July 18, 2002 Thanks for the response guys. I wrote it when I had a very intense crush on this gril at my school.. and pretty much everything in the poem happened. I use to say things that went right over her head, heh. But, it wasn't meant to be. Oh well... my first love (my ex) is who I'm focusing on now, anyhow.
Guest M Nyland Posted July 18, 2002 Report Posted July 18, 2002 for some reason I can pump out sappy poetry and song lyrics in my sleep or something... if you go to http://itsonlywords.com and look up "bigspikehardy" as the composer you can find all the stuff I've written...
Guest Youth N Asia Posted July 18, 2002 Report Posted July 18, 2002 Jesus Christ, we got a couple Jeff Hardy's on our hands here... Just kidding guys, decient stuff
Guest M Nyland Posted July 19, 2002 Report Posted July 19, 2002 I am not Jeff Hardy...for I am not gay.... nor do I paint myself and have seizures to wild lighting displays... and I really enjoy my writing
Guest jimmy no nose Posted July 21, 2002 Report Posted July 21, 2002 I am not Jeff Hardy...for I am not gay.... nor do I paint myself and have seizures to wild lighting displays... and I really enjoy my writing More of a Mark Herny?
Guest M Nyland Posted July 21, 2002 Report Posted July 21, 2002 no....cause I'm not the father of a hand
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