Just Wanted To Stretch My Writing Chops

[Guest Michael Joel Benoit]

I am writing a 5 part journal on my vacation in Florida. I think it is pretty good but I want your opinion on it.

 

Part one is at: http://www.angelfire.com/wrestling3/wrestl...urnalpart1.html

 

and part two is at: http://www.angelfire.com/wrestling3/wrestl...urnalpart2.html

 

I will post part 3 tommorrow.

 

So tell me what you think.

[Guest DrTom]

I think you need to proofread. A lot.

 

A smaller font wouldn't hurt, either.

[Guest Kingpk]

1) Write it in Word first and use the spell and grammar check

 

2) For the love of god, use a smaller font, unless Anglefire does it that way (if that's the case, they suck).

[Guest Michael Joel Benoit]

I just finished the last 3 parts. Here are the links:

 

Part 3:

http://www.angelfire.com/wrestling3/wrestl...urnalpart3.html

 

Part4:

http://www.angelfire.com/wrestling3/wrestl...urnalPart4.html

 

And my personal favorite part 4:

http://www.angelfire.com/wrestling3/wrestl...urnalpart5.html

 

So, read it and tell me what you think.

 

Peace.

[Guest Incandenza]

I'm reminded of Benjy from The Sound and the Fury, though lacking a certain eloquence.

[Guest Kingpk]

Before we entered the park we had to be checked. The difference? Their security was a little more cautious. What do I mean by that? THEY USED WOODEN STICKS TO CHECK BAGS. They didn't force you to remove everything from your bag, they just took a small wooden stick and looked for about 3 seconds then they let you in. Now, maybe its because Universal Studios wasn't considered a terrorist target, or because of the economy, but they should spend alittle more concetration on security right? Right.

 

What were you expecting? Full body cavity searches?