Guest Goodear Report post Posted September 16, 2002 King: It’s now time for the opening triple threat match! Who will win? Jack the Ripper or Ejiro Fasaki? Edwin: What about Cutthroat? All: HAHAHAHAHA! Axis: Let’s go to Funyon. Funyon: This will be a triple threat match, one fall to a finish. Introducing first… Marilyn Manson's "Fight Song" hits the arena as the lights dim and a bit of light illuminates the entranceway. Shots of East End London flash on the video wall as Jack the Ripper storms from the backstage area, yelling threats and insults to the fans of The Artist Formerly Known as The ECW Arena. He steps into the ring and whips his trench coat across the ropes. Funyon: He hails from London, England and weighs in at 230 lbs. Jack The RIPPAAAAAAAAAAAAA~! … His opponent… As “Sellout” by Biohazard greets his arrival, Ejiro Fasaki steps down the entranceway, slapping hands with a number of fans and getting a respectable amount of applause. Wearing blue this evening, Ejiro slingshots himself into the ring and climbs the middle rope, raising his fist to the gathered crowd. Funyon: He weighs in at 188 lbs. And hails from Sarasota, Florida… making his SJL debut… EJIROOOOOOO FASAKIIIIIIIIIIIIII! And finally… There is an instantaneous blackout through out the entire arena with an electric sound and then a pause; only the light rhythms of Our Lady Peace’s “Whatever” can be heard. Then, a blue light paints the entire arena, as a thunderclap echoes through the arena which segues into Our Lady Peace’s “Whatever” blasting through the speakers. The fans roar in appreciation for their favorite loser since Justin from American Idol. Cutthroat makes his appearance, raising his right arm to the heavens as his left arm hangs nearly lifeless at his side due to the injury caused by Judge Mental at the last SJL Wrath. Cutthroat comes down to ringside, reaching over the barrier to slap hands with his public. Cutthroat slides into the ring and jumps up onto the second rope, and throws his good arm up into the air as the Philly faithful cheer their guts out. Funyon: Introducing, “The EXXXXtreme One!” Hailing from Greenwich, Connecticut, and weighing in tonight at 214 pounds, CUUUUUUUUUUUUTTHROAT!!” Fans: He's Extreme! He's Extreme! The three men circle each other for a moment, each one eyeing each other up. Cutthroat takes a swipe at Ejiro, backing him up for a moment. But while Ejiro is eyeing up Cutthroat, Jack the Ripper takes advantage and spears Fasaki square in the chest. Ripper mounts Fasaki and immediately starts to throw right hands at his opponent’s face. Cutthroat grabs Jack by the hair and drags him off Ejiro and begins to rock his head back with a series of punches to the face. Cutthroat rears back and smashes Jack in the face with a big Razor Punch TM that sends The Ripper sprawling over the top rope to the arena floor. Jack pulls himself up by the railing as Cutthroat climbs up to the top rope. Cutthroat launches himself at Jack with a flying bodypress to the outside, but Jack moves aside and Cutthroat destroys himself against the guardrail. Arena: YOU FUCKED UP! YOU FUCKED UP! King: That’s the best part of announcing in Philadelphia, you just sit back and the fans will do it for you. Edwin: Lazy ass. Jack rolls back inside the ring as Cutthroat curls himself into a fetal position. The Ripper is met coming in by Fasaki, who pushes him into a corner and begins to lay in a series of kicks to the chest. Fasaki goes for an Irish whip but Jack reverses and sends Ejiro into the corner with such force that it sends Fasaki into the turnbuckle chest first and crashing into the mat. Jack quickly scoops Fasaki up and whips him into the other corner, and quickly follows with a running dropkick to the chest. All the air goes flying from Ejiro’s lungs as he falls into the center of the ring. Jack waits for Fasaki to get to his feet before whipping him into the ropes and taking his head off with a tremendous jumping clothesline. Ejiro does a full 360-degree flip before landing on the canvas in a heap. Jack quickly checks to make sure Cutthroat hasn’t recovered before he dives on top of Fasaki for a … One! Two! NO! Jack grabs Ejiro by the hair while he’s still on top of him and drives a series of right hands into Ejiro’s face and nose with measured precision. Ripper pulls Fasaki off the canvas, quickly steps behind him, reaches back, and drives Ejiro into the canvas with a reverse neckbreaker. Jack quickly scales his way up to the top rope and eyes Fasaki up, but before he can jump, Cutthroat pops up behind him and shoves Jack onto the ropes, crotch first! Jack hangs there a moment, until Cutthroat begins to shake the ropes up and down, furthering injuring Jack’s groin in the process. Jack goes tumbling from the ropes and falls into the center of the ring. Cutthroat climbs to the top rope and smashes into The Ripper with a missile dropkick that sends the Londoner flying across the ring. Cutthroat regains his feet, ducks under a charging Fasaki clothesline and sidekicks him over the top rope to the floor. With Ejiro out of the way, Cutthroat renews his assault on The Ripper by tossing him against the ropes and catching him on the rebound with a spinning back kick. Jack quickly scrambles to his feet in a corner until Cutthroat charges forward, leaps up, and takes The Ripper over with a big monkey flip. Cutthroat pushes Jack back into a corner and lays in chop after chop, smoking his opponent’s chest again and again. Cutthroat goes for a whip, but Jack slides to break the momentum, turns and catches a charging Cutthroat in a Japanese armdrag. Cutthroat: GRAHHHHHHHHHHH! Axis: Even a simple armdrag to that injured arm and shoulder is enough to send Cutthroat into painful convulsions. King: All thanks to Judge Mental. Thanks Judge! Edwin: You would thank him for that. King: Of course I would. I just did. Didn’t you hear me? Jack quickly cinches on a hammerlock and drives it in deep as Cutthroat lies on his stomach in pain. As referee Matthew Kivell checks on Cutthroat, Jack puts his feet on the ropes for leverage. Cutthroat continues to scream out in pain, but refuses to submit. Meanwhile, Ejiro has recovered and from the outside of the ring, and as his first order of business, tosses Jack’s feet off the ropes, freeing Cutthroat from the hold. Ejiro and Jack meet in the ring face-to-face and nose-to-nose with Jack laying in a viscous verbal tirade. Breaking the tension, Jack and Ejiro start to trade right hands back and forth with Jack eventually getting control, forcing Ejiro back against the ropes. Jack quickly twists and bashes Ejiro in the forehead with a backhand blow. Jack tosses Fasaki against the ropes for a clothesline, but Ejiro ducks underneath and drives Jack down into the mat with a STO leg trip slam. Ejiro hits the ropes for a lionsault but Jack rolls away, so Ejiro lands on his feet. Ejiro waits for Jack to rise, and makes a charge at him, but gets lifted to the ring floor. Thankfully for him, Ejiro lands on his feet unharmed. Fasaki reaches underneath the ropes and trips Jack down. This allows Cutthroat to come flying in with a sitting dropkick to the face of the SJL’s resident serial killer from the 1800’s. Fasaki tries to climb back into the ring, and Cutthroat immediately drops an axe kick as Ejiro’s head is between the ropes. Cutthroat goes back to Jack and begins to chop away in a corner. But Jack quickly turns Cutthroat around and drives an elbow into Cutthroat’s dislocated shoulder. Cutthroat convulses in pain as The Ripper takes the arm and wraps it around the top rope, pulling on the wrist. Referee Matthew Kivell lays in a five count, and forces Jack to break off his attack. Jack drives his elbow into Cutthroat’s shoulder again and again. Kivell finally is forced to physically pull Jack off his piece of meat. Jack shoves the official, and Kivell shoves Jack in retaliation… right into Ejiro! Ejiro grabs The Ripper from behind and drops him backwards with a belly-to-back suplex that drives all of Jack’s weight down on his neck and flips him head over heels in pain. Surveying the situation, Ejiro goes after Cutthroat, driving kick after kick into “The Extreme One’s” injured shoulder. King: That’s right! Cripple that bastard! Axis: I don’t think Fasaki is trying to injure Cutthroat; he’s just trying to win this match up. King: Yeah, just keep telling yourself that. Ejiro winds up the arm with a wristlock and then drives Cutthroat down with a Fujiwara armbar. Ejiro pops his hips off the mat and cranks away on the arm, while Cutthroat struggles to keep from tapping out. Jack the Ripper quickly runs forward and kicks Ejiro strait in the head to break the hold. Jack grabs Fasaki and tosses him out of the ring, and then quickly grabs an armbar of his own on the injured Cutthroat. Jack cranks away with a vengeance until Fasaki quickly slides back into the ring and breaks the hold by kicking The Ripper in the face. Cutthroat rolls out to the apron rubbing his arm and shoulder in order to get some feeling back in the appendage while his opponents are more concerned with each other. Meanwhile, Ejiro whips Jack The Ripper over with a snap suplex, and then follows quickly with a Hennig necksnap. Ejiro sizes Ripper up and takes him right down with a spinning neckbreaker. Ejiro makes a cover… One! Two! Thr.. NO! Cutthroat breaks up the pin fall with a kick to the back. Cutthroat begins to stomp away at both of his opponents with a flurry. But that won’t keep both Ejiro and Jack off balance for long and Jack slams a fist into Cutthroat’s belly. Ejiro and Jack both go behind Cutthroat and lift him up for a double belly-to-back suplex but Cutthroat flips over both and takes them both down with a double reverse DDT. Cutthroat makes the universal sign of “come on mother fuckers” and grabs Ejiro and hits a sit-out jawbreaker that sends Fasaki flying to the mat. Cutthroat then does the same exact thing to Jack The Ripper that sends him tumbling away as well. Fans: Fuck 'em up Cutthroat! Fuck 'em up! Edwin: Isn't Philadelphia the most charming place in the whole world, next to Amsterdam, of course. Axis: Oh yeah, of course. Cutthroat takes Jack and slams him down to the canvas with his right arm, and then takes Fasaki and dumps him right on top of Jack. Cutthroat signals out to his fans and hits the rope for Rollin’ THUNDAH right on both of his opponents. Cutthroat then goes to the ropes, readies himself and slings himself up for a split-leg moonsault. Fortunately for Ejiro, he is able roll out of the way, but unfortunately for Jack, he is not so lucky. Cutthroat stays on Jack for the cover One! Two! But isn’t able to get the three count before Ejiro drops a forearm across Cutthroat’s back. Ejiro picks Cutthroat up and drives him into the canvas shoulder-first with a single arm DDT! Cutthroat nearly passes out from the pain as his shoulder hangs limp on the mat. Sensing victory, Ejiro slaps on the cross armbreaker and attempts to wrench away on the arm with a vengeance. Cutthroat screams in pain and desperately tries to keep his arms locked together so the left one doesn’t get hyper-extended as Ejiro cranks back as hard as he can. They are stuck in a stalemate, that is, until Jack swoops down on the prone Fasaki with one big swanton bomb! Jack scrambles onto Fasaki and hooks a leg while Cutthroat rolls out of the ring. One! Two! Thr…NO! Fasaki gets the shoulder up at two! Jack The Ripper grabs Ejiro by the hair and pulls him into a corner while he climbs onto the middle rope. Jack hooks Fasaki up and drives him into the canvas with a tornado DDT! Not finished yet, Jack hooks Ejiro up and brings him up and down with the 1888 Powerbomb! Jack rolls away and quickly crawls on top of Fasaki for the … One! Two! NO! Ejiro unbelievably kicks away just in the nick of time! Jack slams his fist against the canvas in frustration and grabs the referee by the labels and pushes him back into a corner arguing over the cadence of the count. Jack the Ripper releases Referee Kivell and walks away… right into a Cutthroat right armed clothesline from the apron! Jack stumbles away and fights to his feet only to get hit with a springboard back kick! Cutthroat makes a cover but can’t hook anything with his injured arm! One! Two! NO! The Ripper kicks away! Cutthroat waits on Jack to get to his feet, but gets caught from behind with a knee to the back from Ejiro Fasaki. Cutthroat leans on the middle rope, and Ejiro hits the ropes for a Bossman straddle, but Cutthroat moves aside and Ejiro bounces off the ropes landing on his head. Ejiro tries to pull himself up, and ends up leaning on the middle rope himself. Jack the Ripper hits Cutthroat from behind and whips him into the ropes… but Cutthroat just uses the momentum from the whip to nail Fasaki in the face with the 619!!! Fasaki goes flying away from the ropes as Cutthroat ends up standing on the apron. Jack comes forward and Cutthroat catches him with a shoulder block from the right side in between the ropes. Cutthroat uses the ropes to slide underneath Jack and then runs against the ropes for momentum, but he runs strait into a frankensteiner from The Ripper! Jack quickly grabs a hold of Cutthroat’s shoulder and locks on a reverse armbar! Cutthroat screams like a banshee, feeling his shoulder starting to separate again like it did against Judge Mental! Cutthroat reaches for the ropes but can’t reach!! He drags Jack over a few inches, but he still can’t reach!!! Cutthroat inches himself over… and barely touches the ropes to force the break! Edwin: What a manly display of guts by Cutthroat! Axis: Intestinal fortitude all the way! King: You make it sound this match sound like it’s a hotdog-eating contest. Although Cutthroat might actually be good at that. Jack reluctantly releases the hold and picks Cutthroat up by the left arm. Jack begins to whip Cutthroat back and forth by the arm just like Judge Mental did on Wrath. Whipping him back and forth… back and forth… back and Cutthroat reverses, tossing Jack into Ejiro Fasaki! Ejiro smashes Jack right in the head with a screaming elbow, sending Jack bumping to the canvas in a heap. Ejiro waits for Jack to rise and punches him in the face, sending him to Cutthroat, who punches Jack back to Ejiro, back to Cutthroat, back to Ejiro, back to Cutthroat, and Ejiro finishes the pinball game with another screaming elbow to the head that sends Ripper crashing to the mat. King: Blatant double-teaming! That shouldn't be allowed. This match is supposed to be everyman for himself! Cutthroat and Ejiro send Jack into the ropes for a double hiptoss but Jack counters with a double Ripper's Bulldog! He covers Fasaki! King: Oh sweet karma. That'll teach them! One! Two! NO! Jack leaps onto Cutthroat! One! Two! NO! Both men kick away in time to beat the referee's three count. Jack decides to go after Fasaki, pounding away with a series of right hands in the corner. Jack Irish whips Ejiro into a corner and charges forward, only to get smacked in the face with a boot. Ejiro climbs to the middle rope and launches off, catching Jack with a blockbuster! Ejiro stands back up in the corner, allowing Cutthroat the next shot at their mutual foe. Jack, dazed, slowly rises to his feet. Cutthroat rushes forward and leaps onto Ripper’s head and goes for his “Twister” swinging DDT, but Jack holds on and stays on his feet before driving Cutthroat back into a corner and into Ejiro. With both of his opponents stunned, Jack hooks Cutthroat around the head and pushes off of Ejiro before driving “The Extreme One” into the canvas with “The Ripping!” Cutthroat bounces off the mat and spasms his way all the way to the ropes. Jack quickly regains his feet and snatches the head of Fasaki as well. Jack attempts another “Ripping” but Ejiro forces him to flip all the over his head, causing Jack to land on his feet. Ejiro throws a pair of back elbows to his opponent’s head before totally rocking his world with a screaming elbow. Stunned, The Ripper staggers for a moment before Ejiro hooks his head and runs up the turnbuckle, hitting “The Ejirocution!” Ejiro reaches forward and hooks the leg… One… Two… THREE!!!! Referee Matthew Kivell raises Ejiro’s hand in victory as “Sellout” begins to play again over the sound system. Fasaki climbs to the middle rope and raises his arm in victory to the fans, who gives him an appreciative round of applause. King: Oh… My… God. I just realized. Axis: What? What’s the problem? King: Cutthroat didn’t get pinned. Axis: Yes, that’s true. King: So in a way, Cutthroat didn’t lose!!! IT’S THE SEVENTH SIGN YOU FOOL!!! THE END IS AT HAND!!! IT’S THE APOCALPSE!!! RUN FOR YOUR COTTONPICKING LIVES! ARGH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! The Suicide King runs from the announce position in fear as Axis looks at him in disbelief. He looks to his other broadcast partner. Axis: Can you believe that guy? Edwin: Can’t… move… paralyzed… by… fear. Axis: We’ll be right back. 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Guest Ace309 Report post Posted September 16, 2002 Well, I skimmed it, and here's what I noticed in my precaffeinated state. 1) You have a good feel for Suicide King, but I can't help but think you have trouble differentiating between what Axis and Edwin would say. The stock answer, to quote myself, is, "I just write the left brain for Axis, the right brain for Edwin and the testicles for King." The way this played out for me was that most of the action was being called by Axis. He'd give the move name and some Gorilla Monsoon or neutral JR comment, then Edwin would crack a joke or King would say something mean. Also, Axis is gradually turning into the Generic Japanese Announcer Fella™. For example, say Ejiro hits a backdrop driver on Matty Kivell. Axis: BACKDROPPAH! What a slam! King: Eh, no big deal. It's just his head. Edwin: I'd say we're vastly underestimating the value of head here, eh Kingy? 2) Along that same vein, your Edwin is too sympathetic and not zany enough. Say it with me. "Edwin is zany." Say it again. "Edwin is zany." He also likes pandas. Work that in. 3) Nice opening banter, but it could have been stretched out a little to make it more interesting. The entrances seemed cut and pasted, so that lead to a disjointed feeling of no flow. If you read a lot of the SWF matches, the writers try to meld the entrances together. It just "feels" better to read it that way. 4) There is no tip #4. 5) Think about writing "storystyle." I'm admittedly very biased about this, but I write my matches as Ejiro slams Kivell with a Screaming Elbow. Axis shouts, "SCREAMING ELBOW! What a blow, and he may have drawn blood!" as Edwin just clears his throat and squirms uncomfortably. "What's wrong, Edwin?" "Bleh. I just can't stand the sight of blood. I think it's the colour that makes me sick," says Edwin, as he takes a sip of his strawberry daiquiri. ... as opposed to... Ejiro slams Kivell with a Screaming Elbow. Axis: SCREAMING ELBOW! What a blow, and he may have drawn blood! Edwin: *clears his throat and squirms in his chair* Axis: What's wrong, Edwin? Edwin: Bleh. I just can't stand the sight of blood. I think it's the colour that makes me sick. Edwin leans over and takes a sip of his strawberry daiquiri. I like reading storystyle better than scriptstyle because it feels more natural to me. Your mileage may vary, and Frost is rapidly rising up the WF card writing script, so do whatever feels right to you. Hope this is helpful. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Guest Goodear Report post Posted September 16, 2002 Thanks for your comments, I was pretty worried about my announcer bits, I've always had more trouble writing face dialouge than heel. But I can easily write zany. Good thing Edwin is zany, Edwin is zany, Edwin is zany. I'm also going to try and use the storyline style of writing for the Blank match and see how it works, I might not be any good at it. Early on, it feels a little awkward, but we'll see how it comes together. Worse comes to worse, I'll just go back and rewrite things until they feel right. Only way I'll get any better. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Guest Ace309 Report post Posted September 16, 2002 It's your first match. Everyone has some burrs to work out. Hell, I wrote my first match in all-commentary scriptstyle. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
