Log-Line for my current project...

[Guest Downhome]

The current script that I am working on, is that with the following log-line. This is in no way complete, but it gives you an idea of the project that I am currently working on. There is much, much more to it than what is said here, but this is the basic idea...

 

...the log-line...

 

"A man striken with extreme Obsessive Compulsive Disorder begins to have uncontrollable urges to commit murder and as a result he confides in a local Catholic Priest, thus begining the Priest's battle between going to the police, or keeping his vow's to the Church"

 

...now for starters, the log-line isn't the final one, it isn't official. I will obviously find a better way to word it, I simply posted this to give you an idea of what I am working on. I have based this on research I have done with both Obsessive Compulsive Disorder and the Catholic Church, so this situation is indeed possible. If I can pull this out right, it could be a great pyschological/thriller/drama in my eyes. The struggle with the main character trying to over come his "mental disorder" as he doesn't WANT to kill, he simply has the compulsions to do so. He doesn't go to the police himself, because one of his greatest fears is that of loss of control of his life, which is ironic since he has already lost control of it in the first place...

 

...and the struggle with the Priest trying to decide if he should go to the police, or keep his vow's to the Catholic Church.

 

Anyhow, just let me know what you think so far or ask me any questions you may have!

 

Sincerely,

...Downhome...

[Guest Annoyed Grunt]

Since I'm in film school I'll evaluate it like we do in class.  First, you need a title, preferably a good one.  I know it seems like a small thing, but if you leave out the essentails, nobody will give you a chance.  

 

As for the log line itself, it seems similair to several stories I've seen/read before.  You need to make it seem fresh somehow.  The log line makes it seem like the priest is the main character, but later on in your post you say that the OCD guy the main character.  His story seems much more interesting to me, so I'd advise you to put more of a focus on him in the log line.

[Guest Downhome]

Since I'm in film school I'll evaluate it like we do in class.  First, you need a title, preferably a good one.  I know it seems like a small thing, but if you leave out the essentails, nobody will give you a chance.  

 

As for the log line itself, it seems similair to several stories I've seen/read before.  You need to make it seem fresh somehow.  The log line makes it seem like the priest is the main character, but later on in your post you say that the OCD guy the main character.  His story seems much more interesting to me, so I'd advise you to put more of a focus on him in the log line.

Yes, obviously a title is vital, I simply haven't posted it here, yet, lol. Like I said, that "log-line" isn't the final one, I simply posted it to just get some feedback on the idea for the film. If anyone has any questions, feel free to ask me! :-)