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[Guest Drew_K]

Well? Off with all of ye! Comment! I'm gonna!

[Guest Drew_K]

European Title 1st Pin Wins Match -

Frost © vs. Venom vs. C.I.A. vs. "The Franchise" Mak Francis

 

Strong, impressive match from Mak. I think I still need some practice with the multi man match format, but Mak wrote a great one, and I'd liek to congratulate him on being DOUBLE CHAMP~! Not that that means I'm gonna stop trying to win me some gold.

 

Singles Match -

"The Rising Sun" Y2K vs. "Hollywood" Spike Jenkins

 

Some nice work from Hollywood, very impressive Debut. But as long as he keeps doing that hog call with his spinning DDT, I can't say too many nice things. Seriously. Think about it.

 

Singles Match -

Thor vs. Poisyn

 

Thor's on a roll. With butter. Sure, he's dropped a few to Mak Francis, but Mak has two shiny belts to show why facing him is always a challenge. Thor continues to impress, and improve. I still prefer the DOG of thunder though.

 

Singles Match -

Ced Ordonez vs. Silent

 

Assclowns.

 

Singles Match -

"TNT" Taylor Nicholas Thompson vs. Z

 

Goofy. Stupid. But not as bad as the circumstances surrounding it's late finish. And he didn't use my thumb wrestling spot, after he said he would. So bah.

 

Singles Match -

Renegade vs. Sydney Sky

 

Boo-yah. Big win for the R-Lovin' Renegade masta. Wait to step back into things with a boom.

 

World Title Cage Match -

"Deathwish" Danny Williams © vs. Frost

 

WOW! Go Danny. Wait to show 'em. And me. Yeah, yeah, I picked Frost. but I knew it would be a close one. Bad night for Frost, but a heck of a night for great wrestling action. With a few NOTABLE exceptions, of course.

[Guest 5_moves_of_doom]

Danny's match is Godly, read it or die.

 

Mak's match is Godly, read it or die.

 

Tod' segment is Godly, read it or die.

 

Everything else seems good.

 

Ahem, and I would like to say, if no one comments on the stuff that Tod, Danny, Frost, Ced, Z, and I wrote for this show, you're just a prick, it's our last match in the JL for God's sake.

 

Oh, and yes, my match sucked, but here's the story behind that. I wrote the first 1500 words aboot, and sent them to Z, as we were doing a joint match.

 

Z was being a little slow on the writing side, and told me to warn him if he didn't speed up. He didn't, so I warned him.......to 98%, not knowing that that will get the warned person banned from AIM.

 

Z-ster dissapeared for aboot 6 hours, I guess since he was pissed off.

 

He finally showed up in chat, and was pissed, but forgave me.

 

However, as some sort of psychological form of revenge, he decided to finish the rest of our match, and basically put me out of the picture.

 

I was Ok with this until today when I was informed that he NO-SHOWED by King at about 4:30.

 

I didn't care, but I did when he said we wouldn't be bumped with a double no-show.

 

I didn't WANT to be bumped, but knew Z did...

 

So, from 5:30 to 7:00, I wrote the res of our match off of the existing 1500 words.

 

I sent it in, unedited, and fucking rushed (save the first 1500 words, which I thought were pretty damn good,) but it was all mine (which is a bad thing, as Z rules.)

 

So....yeah Z, I think you're a jerk for not writing, but I feel bad knowing that your jerkiness was caused by my jerkiness. So, I say forgive and forget...actually, don't forget, because though it was horrible, I'm sure people will remember this match.

 

A lot of troublesome shit went into this match, so PLEASE comment on it, especially for certain parts you liked/disliked.

[Guest Edwin MacPhisto]

I have never dropped acid.

 

After reading the Z/TNT match, I don't think I have to.

 

Holy shit, dude.

[Guest Suicide King]

Oh, you and Z still would have been bumped TNT. I was just fuckin with ya.

 

And everyone please note that what I said about Danny's match in the summary still stands.

[Guest 5_moves_of_doom]

Oh, you and Z still would have been bumped TNT. I was just fuckin with ya.

...So you threatened me with something I wanted to happen? Man, I've had reverse psycholigy pulled on me in the past, but GEEZ.

[Guest Coffin Surfer]

And everyone please note that what I said about Danny's match in the summary still stands.

Thanks, but you really think it was better than my Syd Iron Man Match? As far as descriptions and commentary goes I feel the Frost match was better. But on in ring work or emotion, I don't think it was as good as the Syd match. The only flaw in that match, was I disliked the faked injury spot.

 

I think I could have done a much better job in capturing Frost's emotion than I did. The only part I really feel I did that, was the end where Frost goes psycho on Williams, with the mounted punches. I still don't think it touches Syd's comeback attempt in the last 2 minutes of the iron man match. Which worked so perfectly, because all the moves she tried had worked on Wililams earlier, but in her weakned state, he just shrugs them off. But that's the authors opinion, which doesn't really count.

[Guest kelloggs]

Time for the first ever "Franchisable" long winded comments...OF DOOM in honor of bumpie TNT

 

European Title 1st Pin Wins Match -

Frost © vs. Venom vs. C.I.A. vs. "The Franchise" Mak Francis

Well my match won. It's godly so you better read it or die. I just wish i could edit better. CIA thinks he needs to work on his multiple men matches but I think I'm about to start something with a great writer. There was a big thing going down with the sWo recruiting TNT but he got bumped and ruined everything so we need to replace that.

 

Anyways I'm a ~DOUBLE CHAMP~ like Stryke . I think i'm gonna cry. Our angle should be nice with this turn of events besides in an angle the bigger payoff always comes from a super over, pop the crowd like rice crispies, face[CIA] chasing the dasterdly and uuber cocky heel[Me] to get the title.

 

I just won't give up the title without a fight or until he whoops me in a one on one match-up...whichever comes first.

 

Frost's promo

Frost you wrote a great promo. Your promo addressed thinks that I questioned about your feud continuing. The Syd question being the biggest one.

 

By the way this was a line and a half:

Frost: “Before I go, I’ll leave you with a present. I’ll leave you with your fondest wish. I’ll leave here tonight on a broken wish.”

 

And you left a lot of things open like the Tod feud which you guys address later in the show and even in Danny's winning match. A fond farewell from the SJL to you. Come back down from above the glass ceiling and give the indepth constructive critcism that has helped me so much. You acted like a true leaader in the Junior League.

 

Hollywoods promo

Holly-WOOD your promo was quality. I was remembering a cross between Rob in ECDub even though Alfonzo did most of the talking, well whistle blowing. And the guys from Dude Where's my Car. ~SHIBBY~

 

Althought it was extremely funny, which it was, you better respect the sWo next time and mention us. Actually I don't think it's in Y2K's stats yet. I can see that you like this character. Your probably puffing the magic dragon, smoking the chiba, etc. as we speak aren't you.

 

A lot of good talent coming in the summer. It's a shame we lost a great writer like Venom when everybodies coming back and joining.

 

Singles Match -

"The Rising Sun" Y2K vs. "Hollywood" Spike Jenkins

And onto you match which drew laughs for the opening segment. Charles in Charge is mad old school and the Mike Anthony Hall reference was good but your match was a little short with the opening stuff. I liked it but since you had a low word count it took away from the action. I think that one thing that may help is heels should normally control the offense. Faces can dominate in extended spots but heels should normally run the show. You had a little too much offense as a face. But not to be a complete ass your match was good. Good enough to beat somebody with three matches of experience over you. And that impresses a lot. I look forward to reading your next match. By the way I love how you used the interference.

 

Singles Match -

Thor vs. Poisyn

Thor comes up with the big win over Poisyn in what is a huge upset. Your spots were good as usual and the references back to our match was great. You continue to improve every week and that pushes me to be better as I barely got by you last time. Just work on the believablity a little and you'll be more the shit than you already are. And I'm begging you to add a little humor to your character. it won't hurt ya too much.

 

Singles Match -

Ced Ordonez vs. Silent

Well King pulled the cock out of it's drawn but we didn't get to see it.

Ced is most underrated and i can't wait to see him in the SWF J.O.B SQUAD shirt included. I remember back when Al first came out with that. None of my friends understood as I was the inly one in the know.

 

Singles Match -

"TNT" Taylor Nicholas Thompson vs. Z

TNT is golden. Always golden. Forever golden. Z is golden, Always golden. Foever golden even though he didn't write in this match. Z I feel your pain about the warning but he probably didn't realize that it can basically freeze you out on AIM.

 

That said oh my god that was the funniest pile of shit I've ever scene. I was really laughing out loud. Not snickering but full out laughing. Frost's spot was the shizzie and the THOTH thing in the begin was unbelievable. For a rushed match you did very well to beat Z.

 

Flesherandal whispers to Mak and Mak whispers back to Flesherandal because he got a headache from my now changed stats

 

Oh they joint wrote it. What do you mean every one knew...

 

By the way did you come up with this...

 

Z: “Huh?”

TNT: “You know Z I’ve wanted this match for a long time…”

Z: “Where are you?”

TNT: “One after one, so many have fallen…”

Z: “Where are you?”

TNT: “Leaving a trail of fiery debris behind me…”

Z: “Where are you?”

TNT: “All have watched me win…”

Z: “Where are you?”

TNT: “All have watched me lose…”

Z: “Where are my underpants?”

TNT: “But now it is YOUR turn…to watch me…EXPLODE!!!”

Z: “Where are you?”

TNT: “I am up, I am down, I am all around…wait, no, the second one.”

 

Too funny along with the POSE DOWN OF DOOM! They were money

 

Tods segment

Tod brings up his Frost feud again as it will continue in the WF. Tod is the hottest writer in the SJL bumpies even though Danny is really, really giving him a run after his win against Frost. Tod I mark for that beat down. You wrote your sucking up and took your Frosty beating like a champ

 

Singles Match -

Renegade vs. Sydney Sky

Rene comes back and wins with a vengence. Holy what the...I'm in trouble. That match was NICE as in bangin' and you've got ring rust?! Great job putting Syd over and the Renebreaker is already looking like a super strong finisher.

 

World Title Cage Match -

"Deathwish" Danny Williams © vs. Frost

I read it all like most of your matches and you really proved yourself with a win against the unbeatable Frost. I loved it all but I really want to see the match you beat as Frost must have pulled out all the stops.

 

By the way Danny you're right your opinion doesn't matter as this match was the shit hands down

 

M. "Boy that was a lot to type" Francis

[Guest 5_moves_of_doom]

By the way did you come up with this...

 

Z: “Huh?”

TNT: “You know Z I’ve wanted this match for a long time…”

Z: “Where are you?”

TNT: “One after one, so many have fallen…”

Z: “Where are you?”

TNT: “Leaving a trail of fiery debris behind me…”

Z: “Where are you?”

TNT: “All have watched me win…”

Z: “Where are you?”

TNT: “All have watched me lose…”

Z: “Where are my underpants?”

TNT: “But now it is YOUR turn…to watch me…EXPLODE!!!”

Z: “Where are you?”

TNT: “I am up, I am down, I am all around…wait, no, the second one.”

 

Too funny along with the POSE DOWN OF DOOM! They were money

Yes, I did come up with that, but Z conspired the genius that is the POSEDOWN OF DOOM!!!!

[Guest crusen86]

Note: next person to post the comment thread without commenting in it dies. DIES. DIIIIEEEEESSSSSSSS!

 

Or jobs to Cutthroat for a month.

[Guest 5_moves_of_doom]

Note: next person to post the comment thread without commenting in it dies. DIES. DIIIIEEEEESSSSSSSS!

 

Or jobs to Cutthroat for a month.

Ahem. Look at the first reply Cusen.

[Guest crusen86]

Well, that's kind of what made me post it.

[Guest hhh6294]

Pimpin' show folks!

 

Good luck to everyone getting bumped... I hope ot write against you sometime in the near future!

[Guest chirs3]

Oh my God, that TNT/Z match was hilarious. There are so many golden lines I can't begin to count them all. If you haven't yet, READ THIS MATCH.

[Guest Insanityman]

Renegade wins= (Y)! Still have it dude. Also that TNT match was awesome (with Z's help). Hollywood wrote an awesome promo and so did Frost. I enjoyed the Deathwish match, and Mak becomes double champ.

 

 

 

w00t.

[Guest Longdogger_Pete]

Since I'm busy focusing on my PPV match tonight, the rankings will be delayed until Monday. However, it'll be the big monthly update.

[Guest Longdogger_Pete]

Hey, look, it's Sunday, and the Renegade SJLer of the Week Award goes to...

 

Renegade! (Hey, how weird is that?)

 

Congratulations, Renegade!

[Guest Renegade]

WHOO! I won my own award! (Y)