Metal Commentaroonies...

[Guest Powerplay]

From the looks of it, it had it all. The matches, at first glance, seemed fantastic. I encourage EVERYONE (And I mean EVERYONE) to try and make comments on the matches and the promos. This show put the WWE to shame, BIG TIME. Comments will come soon from me.

[Secret Agent 0]

Yes indeed. Excellent show. I will make in depth comments once i have had a chance to read everything throughly and it sinks in.

 

I encourage EVERYONE (And I mean EVERYONE) to try and make comments on the matches and the promos.

 

I second this. You want to improve, well help us improve as well.

[Guest Powerplay]

Comments!

 

Opening Promo!

 

First, there was nothing.

 

…

 

…

 

…

 

Then, there was Metal.

 

That's the way to start a show. I just really dig that opening.

 

…Yes. I am injured.”

 

Boooooooooooooooo!

 

“Yes. I won’t be in the ring for a bit.”

 

Boooooooooooooooo!

 

 

“Yes. Your punk rockstar isn’t going to be wrestling for some time.”

 

Boooooooooooooooo!

 

Myers looks around at the arena. The fans begin chanting his name. As the “MYERS! MYERS! MYERS! MYERS!” enters his ears, he smiles, even if it’s for a little while.

 

“But I mean…hey…I’m not done…yeah, I’m injured…”

 

…

 

“But that doesn’t mean I…can’t hang around a bit, can I?”

 

Yaaaaaaaaaaaaay…

 

And thus, Matt begins channelling Shawn Michaels.

 

“So yeah. I’m gunna be out of it for a while. But if anyone. And when I say anyone, I mean YOU Judge Mental. YOU! Judge Mental, YOU are the man who took my title, and now a piece of my career away from me. YOU were the one who was set on doing this. It was YOU. YOU. YOU. YOU! YOU! YOU!”

 

Hey, I had it before you did .

 

“And Judge…I’ve got you a gift, and for you, it’s Christmas come early, because tonight your gunna get it!” Matt Myers, “It’s got your name on it. Literally.”

 

Matt pulls out more of the wallet chain to reveal a note attached, as it reads:

 

TO: JUDGE MENTAL

FROM: MATT MYERS

MERRY CHRISTMAS, SEE YOU IN HELL

 

Matt smirks as the camera zooms in on it, as your hear these final words before the camera cuts.

 

“I’ll see you tonight, Judge."

 

Meh, I have the one from the last match . Seriously, though, great stuff here, and a fittingly great opening promo to the best JL show in more than two months.

 

Holly's Promo

 

(Camera's suddenly cut to the backstage area, as "Hollywood" Spike Jenkins, ready in his gear for his match, paces back and forth in an empty hallway. Spike, obviously nervous about his Window Pain match later that night, continues traveling back and forth, when he turns around, and walks straight into the giant chest of SWF superstar, Frost!)

 

(Y) at Holly promo. (Y)(Y) at the inclusion of Frost.

 

HSJ: Yeah, yeah. What else?

 

Frost: Well, I guess I can tell you the secret.

 

HSJ: The secret?

 

Frost: The secret.

 

HSJ: The secret?

 

Frost: Yes, the secret.

 

There's a secret?

 

HSJ: Dude, you have to tell me the secret.

 

Frost: All right...

 

HSJ: Thanks man, I really need to know this.

 

Frost: Well, the secret to winning the Window Pain match...

 

HSJ: Yeah...

 

Frost: And not got injured on the way....

 

HSJ: Yeah.....!

 

Frost: Is to...

 

HSJ: YEAH?

 

Yeah, yeah?

 

(Suddenly, a phone starts to ring. Frost looks down at his pants, and reaches into his pocket, pulling a cell phone out. Frost flips the phone open and puts it up to his ear. After a few "Yes", "No" and "Ok"'s, Frost flips the phone close, and puts it back in his pocket.)

 

Frost: Spike, it was nice talking to ya, but I have to jet.

 

HSJ: WHAT?

 

Frost: Sorry man, I'll talk to you later. Tell me how you did in the match.

 

(Frost walks off screen as Spike stands their with his jaw to the floor, speechless.)

 

HSJ: WHAT ABOUT THE SECRET? GOD DAMNIT!

 

DE-nied!

 

HSJ: Yeah?

 

Frost: Don't get thrown through a glass window. I got to go. See ya around.

 

(Frost walks off as Spike stands there staring towards the direction he walked out in.)

 

HSJ: That is advice. THAT'S SOME PRETTY BAD ADVICE!

 

(Spike leans back, hitting the wall behind him hard, placing his hands in his face. Suddenly, he begins to weep.)

 

HSJ: IM GOING TO DIE!!!!!

 

Bahahaha.... Holly, you are always good for a Jericho-esque comedy promo. A remember a while back the one you did against Thor that was downright hilarious. Good work.

 

Window Pain Elimination Match by Dace Night

 

The cameras fade into the packed MGM Grand in Las Vegas, as Axis and The Suicide King pick the action back up.

 

"Axis, this is Vegas, and they always say anything is legal in Vegas, event Ultraviolence. I just can't wait for it."

 

"You're very right King, this sure as hell anit New Jersey. We've got three guys who'll want to take each other after last week, and then you throw in an insane flyer, it just more unpredictable." Axis says

.

"Dace is four and nothing without a loss so far. He's beaten Jack The Ripper once before, then he and Spike took Jack out last week, and then Spike took Dace out with Jack's cane."

 

"Who are you supporting into this one then King?" Axis questions

 

"The winner, naturally." King answers back.

 

Nice opening banter. A real improvement from your previous matches.

 

Dragging Spike to the outside, Dace pulls him along the floor and throws him over the barrier. Following him over with some more blows, he takes Spike for a round crowd tour.

Both Jack and Insane are back up, they lock up, arm drag from Jack, charges at Insane as he comes back up, to be arm dragged over to the mat himself. Charges once more, and is arm dragged once more. Insane tries to lift Jack up, but gets kicked off. Wristlock by Jack, spins round, and hooks Insane's head, taking Insane down with a snapmare, landing him in a seated position.

Bouncing off the ropes, Jack comes flying in, but Insane drops back, throws his legs up into the air and sends Jack over head to land flat on his back on the mat.

 

I think you still lack description in the moves, but still much better than before. And I like how it's more bunched up together, giving the sequences a more connected feeling.

 

Brawling back, exchanging lefts and rights, Spike and Dace come back through from the crowd. Tumbling over the barrier, Dace rolls Spike back into the ring, before following him back in as well.

Charging over the Jack, Dace stalls him with a knee to the gut, locks his arm through his own legs for a pumphandle, but Spike sneaks in a low blow to break the move up. As Dace slowly turns round, wincing in pain, Spike grabs his head and drops back sharply, spiking Dace head first to the mat. Both Insane and Jack come back to their feet. Both try for dropkicks, sailing past each other in the air. Coming back to their feet once again, only to be taking back off with a double clothesline from Spike.

Taunting over his opponents Spike laps up the boos.

 

Perfect Spike. Much much better than last time; it seems like you have a better handle on his character in this one.

 

Driven on by the crowd's jeers, Spike runs, into a handspring, a double back flip, twists in mid air and lands a kick to the still stunted Insane, straight in the face.

 

That's crazy, man. I think it could have been helped by a little more description, but a cool spot nonetheless.

 

A general comment: This match seems much more balanced than the last one, with most people getting in an equal share of moves and spots in. Good job in the balancing.

 

Now Insane is back up. But Jack cuts him off with a boot to the gut, ducking behind him and locking his arms around his waist, Jack brings him up for a backbreaker, but Insane throws his legs up, catching Jack around the neck and throwing him off his feet with a headscissors take over.

 

The first part of this sequence seems awkward, since the first sentence is really short and seems out of place. I think it may have been a little better had you split it up different: "Now Insane is back up, but Jack cuts him off with a boot to the gut. Ducking behind him and locking his arms around his waist, Jack brings him up for a backbreaker, but Insance throws his legs up, catching jack around the neck and throwing him to the ground with a headscissors take over."

 

But Insane pushes off with his feet and springs over Jack, landing on his feet, still holding both of Jack's arms. Switching his grip to around Jack's mid section, Insane manages to pull Jack up into the air. Jack shifts his weight back and takes Insane other with a hurricanrana, but in mid flip Insane shifts his own weight and rolls through Jack's rana with a sunset flip.

 

I believe I've seen a video clip of Rey Mysterio and another wrestler doing this in Japan...

 

You tend not to start with He's, Insane's, and Spike's, which is good. But the problem is, you don't start with them at all. You should throw out a couple "Spike begins" or "Dace quickly reverses" in there to keep the writing sounding fresh.

 

Turing his attention to Dace, Spike stomps away on his prone form. Picking a dazed Dace to his feet, Spike stalls with a well places rake of the eyes. Then hooking his head, and reaching down, grabbing the leg, Spike lifts with all his effort and brings Dace over, dropping him down with a fishermans buster on the chair.

 

Only thing to say there is "E-C-Dub! E-C-Dub! E-C-Dub!". I think that should have gotten a "Holy Shit! Holy Shit!", but it gets old if you have two in a row like this....

 

Insane comes charging in, but Spike leaps, and cracks him in the back of the head with an Enzuguri. Back to his feet, Jenkins turns, and Superkicks Jack off the top rope. Falling through the air, The Ripper crashes down through the Window Pain at ring side.

 

Holy Shit! Holy Shit!

 

Cool way to put a guy through the glass. Nice spot.

 

Letting Spike out of the hold, he throws him into the corner. Ducking behind Spike, Insane brings both his arms up under Spike's in a full nelson. Leaping to the turnbuckles as Dace picks up a chair. Dace winds up as Insane dives off the turnbuckles pulling Spike with him to the Brink of Insanity, as Dace unleashes a brutal chair shot, plastering Spike in the face.

 

Holy Shit! Holy Shit! Chants rain from the crowd.

 

"Oh My God! Insane takes Spike Jenkins' down with the Brink of Insanity, right into a brutal chair shot from Dace! That one nearly took Spike's jaw clean off his face."

 

OWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!

 

Dace wraps his arms around his neck in a Front Face Lock Choke, squeezing down, trying to cut of the air and blood to Insane's head an make him pass out. Insane struggles, trying to break out of the Crownless, Insane jumps, but is brought back down to his feet as Dace clamps down harder on the hold.

Making a huge bound Insane leaps up to the barricade, but before he can make another move, Dace throws himself backwards, taking Insane over with him, off the barricade and crashing back first onto the arena's hard floor with a front facelock suplex.

 

"And Insane tries to break free of the Crownless by leaping onto the ring barricade, but Dace just takes him off and over, planting him on the floor!"

 

Slowly coming back to his feet, Dace picks Insane back up. Placing an arm around his neck, Dace lifts him up into the air before dropping to one knee, pulling Insane back down and driving his back across his outstretched knee.

 

"From Crownless to Faithless."

 

Neat move transition, there, and all while keeping the choke hold on.

 

With his lower jaw a crimson gore of his own blood, Spike rolls to the outside, and heads for another Window Pain. Slowly, hesitantly, he starts lifting one from out the shattered glass left by Insane Luchador being powerbombed through two Window Pains. Trying to avoid any bit of glass that he can.

 

NICE description. You should do more of this in your matches. Though, there should be a comma between Panes and Trying. Picky picky me:P.

 

Very very good match here. Certainly one of your best, and it looks like Dace is quite at home in the hardcore element. Very good showing.

 

Judge Promo

 

Please, I'd like comments, criticisms, death threats and love notes. Any sort of comment, please ?

 

Well, more comments to come tomorrow, because I'm out for the night. Later!

[Guest HollywoodSpikeJenkins]

About the Window Pain match...

 

 

Due to it being 3 AM and all, so me just reading little parts...

 

 

 

WHY AM I THE ONLY ONE TAKING SICK BUMPS?

 

 

Damn me for not being able to say No to a sick bump just to make the fans go home happy.

[Guest Dace59]

Hey, Jack took one, so did Insane.

You took two, and I just got hit with a chair or onto a chair alot,

[Guest Powerplay]

Spike, you Fisherman Bustered him onto a chair. That's a pretty bad as well.

[Guest Goodear]

Word... Time to make with the comments, sweet sassy molassy.

 

Opening Promo OF DOOM!

 

…Yes. I am injured.”

 

Boooooooooooooooo!

 

“Yes. I won’t be in the ring for a bit.”

 

Boooooooooooooooo!

 

“Yes. Your punk rockstar isn’t going to be wrestling for some time.”

 

Boooooooooooooooo!

 

Myers looks around at the arena. The fans begin chanting his name. As the “MYERS! MYERS! MYERS! MYERS!” enters his ears, he smiles, even if it’s for a little while.

 

“But I mean…hey…I’m not done…yeah, I’m injured…”

 

…

 

“But that doesn’t mean I…can’t hang around a bit, can I?”

 

Yaaaaaaaaaaaaay…

 

Thumbs up, cheap pop. I love these little fan interaction spots that people right. I mean this is fresh out of the face handbook, it rules so very much. I think I personally could learn to incorporate a whole lot more fan interaction with the crowd than I usually do. But this was just the peachiest sort of peach that I should use.

 

“You wanted to get rid of me, well guess what, I’ll still be here. I’ll still be here and I know how to get into your head. So don’t think your going to get off that…easily. Now…Mental…as everyone knows…Christmas, the jolliest time of the year is right around the corner.”

 

This is a great way to get some heat on Matt vs. Judge after a somewhat lackluster main event last week. Focusing on some head games with the usually unflappable Judge is good way to go, since it plays to Matt's strengths and can bring some character development out of my fearless leader.

 

SPIKE Promo

 

Why do I think spelling his name SPIKE Jenkins would just be perfect via the Puro heel style? Anyway, random musing, moving right along.

 

(Spike leans back, hitting the wall behind him hard, placing his hands in his face. Suddenly, he begins to weep.)

 

HSJ: IM GOING TO DIE!!!!!

 

Jenk = Jericho + Matt Hardy + Mikey Whipwreck!!! And quite frankly, that's mighty awesome. Bonus points for the Frosty Man... but he should been eating Tacos.

 

Window Pain Match

 

One of the sickest spotfests ever. Dace knows how to put the matches together if I do say so myself, but like JM said, he still has a few steps to take in the description department. But that is rapidly sorting itself out. I also think the match has a little problem since Spike and Dace have so many 'named' moves. In my matches, and this is just me, I always make sure to explain what a move is when it has a name like that. But like I said, that is just me.

 

Pushing up off the top, Insane comes off with some Huge Air, diving down with a leg drop. But managing to roll away, Jack dodges the leg drop, leaving Insane to nail nothing but mat, and have his spine compressed from the force.

 

Good use of description here, the compressed spine comment is especially good. And missing the legdrop that quickly in a match is totally logical since its like 3 minutes in at the point he goes for it. In character for IL though, in my opinion.

 

Dace comes back to his feet with a hail of cheers from the crowd. Wrapped up in his ego and taunting, Spike doesn't notice. Tapping Spike on the should, Dace smiles as Spike slowly turns round, and Dace lands a stiff chop to the chest, followed by another and another and another. A boot to the gut doubles Spike over, pulling him between his legs, Dace lifts him up, spins and drops to the mat with a spinning piledriver.

 

Holding fast on Spike, he stands up, spins around and dropping him to the mat again, with a spinning piledriver. Dragging Spike up by his hair, Dace mouths off at him. Flipping him off, he drives a knee to the gut, doubling Spike over. Pulling his arm through his legs, clamps down on his free arm, Dace brings Spike up over him shoulder, cradles his head, slips an arm between Spike's legs and slams him down with a pumphandle cradle emerald frusion.

 

Now there is a sweet sequence. SWEEEEEET Sequence. I would have made it a bit more important to the match though, since it seems like a sure match ender to me (I'm a complete piledriver mark). I would move this back a little later into the macth when it is just you and Spike in there. But I can see where you are going with it.

 

Letting Spike out of the hold, he throws him into the corner. Ducking behind Spike, Insane brings both his arms up under Spike's in a full nelson. Leaping to the turnbuckles as Dace picks up a chair. Dace winds up as Insane dives off the turnbuckles pulling Spike with him to the Brink of Insanity, as Dace unleashes a brutal chair shot, plastering Spike in the face.

 

Holy god. You are a sick, sick, wonderful person for writing this. I can see where the CZW background is totally apropriate for Dace now. Oooopha. Another sure match ender there IMO. I would have had the commentators saying something like, "Good thing Spike has to go through some glass or this thing would be over..." or something just to highlight the spot.

 

Finally to Spike's Question,

WHY AM I THE ONLY ONE TAKING SICK BUMPS?

 

Because Jenkins getting killed = RATINGZ. Everyone know it.

 

Judge Mental PROMOEDGE

 

Well, maybe I'm not the best to judge, Judge, since the shock was already known to me (for obvious reasons) but I'll give up some comments anyway. Because I am all arrogant and junk.

 

The crowd gives some cheap heat at the smack at Matt while King nods his head. “It took me two weeks to get this belt back, and I had to pin everyone in the way to win it. And what did the last champion do? Lose. Over and over again. I beat the man twice, and then I had to carry him through his match with MVS. Even when he held the belt, it was always obvious who the real champion was.” The crowd throws out some more heat, and Axis speaks up in defense of Matt.

 

This ties in nicely with what I was saying about Matt's promo. Myers needs to play the head games with JM since the Judge has pretty much been Vader for months now. Can't beat him physically? Go for the mind. Matt has to get some heat on Judge to make the feud work.

 

Of course, I’m the best wrestler in the fed today-” more boos, and he continues on, “- But I’m no match for a double or even triple team.

 

Your Ejiropean Champion would care to disagree But anyway, this is a pretty good seel job for your next match against WildChild and Johnny. It's going to be a nasty scene, bro.

 

WildChild vs. Major League Soccer

 

WildChild jobs again... in his own match... to my cheating ways! WildChild's got me starting to think I'm not carrying my wieght in this thing. But not to worry, there shall be some work from me next show! I promise.

 

”I’ll give Wildchild this much credit,” adds the King. “The book on him used to be about one page long: ground him, and you’ve got him beat. But he showed last week that he’s not completely inept as a real wrestler.”

 

“A more ringing endorsement one is not likely to find,” deadpans Axis.

 

Good use of storytelling in the ring, getting over the changes that have been coming from the WildChild home office.

 

With casual ease, Van Siclen kicks Wildchild off, sending him flying backwards into the ropes. On the rebound, Van Siclen plants his feet into Wildchild’s midsection and flips him overhead, but Wildchild lands on his feet, runs to the opposite ropes, and lands on the second rope, springing off it and twisting in midair as he lands on the surprised Mike Van Siclen with a flying body splash!

 

A very nice sequence that adds a twist to the conventional Monkey Flip counter fest. I like how WildChild is always, always hitting the ropes for momentum. It's a nice touch that should help a lot people write your character.

 

Wildchild crawls over the barricade, and leads Van Siclen back to the ring, rolling him underneath the bottom rope, and rolling in after him to beat the referee’s fourteen count. He picks Van Siclen up off the mat, and tries to whip him to the opposite corner, but Van Siclen holds on to the ropes to prevent the whip attempt, and pulls Wildchild back into him, holding onto his arm while ducking behind him, and grabbing his other arm, pulling it across his chest, and falling backwards, dropping him harshly to the mat with a Crossface Halo!

 

Nice use of the Halo as a transitional move and a pretty good description of the move to boot. I fully endorse it.

 

With Wildchild hanging upside down, Van Siclen hooks his legs over his arms and falls off the top turnbuckle, flattening Wildchild underneath him on the mat! The crowd chants “Holy Shit” as both men lay motionless.

 

“Styles Clash! Oh my Gawd,” shrieks Axis. “That came out of nowhere!”

 

He's got the gift ladies and gents. Puts together the description and the action together so well and so effeciently that I never get lost with what is going on, but still get a very good flavor of it so its not all... rana blocked, Styles clash. Just a word on the ending sequence... I think you could have built yourself up a little better as being more of a threat to MVS. Like, you dodge a legdrop and hit the pinball and then I trip you. I think it would have been more exciting if you would have put some near falls in there in to really highlight how much Ejiro screwed you over.

 

Janus vs Morin

 

I think I expected Janus to kill Morin dead, just to get himself over. But instead he went a much smarter route of trying to win the match without totally decimatiing a fellow face in the process. But I think I might have just been overanxious to see Janus go on a murder spree since I kept reading thinking to myself 'When is Janus gonna kill him?" I also see why you really didn't have Janus hit more than a move at a time, since just picking on Morin would be more likely to draw the heel heat in an actual match. Sequences like this

 

King appears to be right, as, unable to hook Janus' legs, Morin rolls off the giant before anything bad happens. Using what came best to him earlier in the match, Morin runs back to the ropes as Janus stands up - but instead of hitting a Flying Clothesline, he finds himself lifted by the giant into a painful Whirl Sideslam - and a pin.

 

ONE!

TWO!

Morin kicks out, barely, dazed from the high-power moves Janus is using on him. The giant sits, then stands and looks down at Morin for a moment as if wondering why he kicked out.

 

... illustrate what I'm talking about. Smart planning, if I may say so. Janus will probably let loose a lot more in the upcoming tag match since Jack and Dace aren't as sympathetic.

 

Janus perches on the top rope, but before he can execute any sort of move, Morin wearily climbs onto the turnbuckle after him, punching the giant in the face. Janus locks a hand around Morin's throat as if planning to Chokeslam him off the top rope, but Morin fights the grip off and latches his legs around Janus' neck - and hits a Frakensteiner that flips the giant over onto the canvas with a THUD. Without missing a beat, the woozy Morin jumps up onto the second rope, then the top - nearly slipping off the top rope - and flips over in another Double-Jump Moonsault. And this time, he hits it.

 

And Morin makes him pay! Oh sweet irony! I think you could have served things up a little more with Morin being all "come and get me, you big monster" while getting pummeled. But all in all, a fine first time effort in getting your character across as being sympathetic to Morin, but not weak in any way.

 

The giant looks down at the practically unconscious Morin for several moments, then shakes his head and leaves the ring, walking to the back as his music continues to play....

 

EVIL PROMO

 

IT'S EVIL! Seems very Sigil-ish, but still way effective. The Dean of Disco IS COMING!

 

Johnny vs. Fugue

 

The Vertebreaker is starting to become the Memphis piledriver for the SJL, I just thought I would mention that.

 

Your build to Fugue's entrance was AWESOME if a bit too long to quote here. But you do a great job of stretching out the drama and effectively paying off all the intrege.

 

Actually,” King replies, “Since all he knows is basically punching and kicking, I would assume he knows very little of those kinds of moves.”

 

“Well you know what assuming does, King.”

 

“Well you know what my fist does, Axis.”

 

Good use of Johnny's history through the announcers, recognizing that JD uses a whole lot of strikes in his matches just about all the time (since he's WWE style! BOYYEEEEE!) While keeping Axis and King totally in character as far as we know them.

 

“Ouch, He’s going to hyperextend his elbow like that!”

 

“Fugue is just showing his technical expertise there.” King adds. “Johnny can’t seem to do much outside of brawling so lets get rid of that arm and see how well he does!”

 

“Not a bad game plan.”

 

And now Fugue works to cut off Johnny's gameplan, great use of psychology there. This is rapidly turning into Johnny's best match yet... and yes, that IS saying something.

 

…. AND STANDS!!

 

“GOOD GOD! I DON’T THINK I HAVE EVER SEEN ANYTHING LIKE THIS BEFORE! FUGUE HAS THE HARMONY LOCKED IN BUT JOHNNY DANGEROUS IS STANDING TALL!”

 

“THIS IS IMPOSSIBLE!”

 

“THE HELL IT IS, KING! HE’S DOING IT! JOHNNY DANGEROUS HAS FUGUE UPSIDE DOWN AND ON HIS BACK!”

 

THE CROWDS LET OUT A MONSTROUS CHEER LIKE NEVER BEFORE HEARD FOR JOHNNY DANGEROUS AS HE STANDS WITH FUGUE LOCKED ONTO HIS BACK AND LETS OUT A HUGE BATTLE CRY, AND-

 

“NO,” shouts the Suicide King, “THIS CAN’T HAPPEN!”

 

Hell of a sequence... HELL OF A FINISH. Sweet ass work that should give Johnny quite the lift up to the uppercard! Congrats!

 

Closing Stuff

 

I wrote this until we got to Matt's involvement. It's all good after that, with Fugue turning the tide as the numbers prove to be too much for even a Wallet chain to turn the tide. Next time though, we should have Me or Fugue lock on our submissions and have the other two continue to stomp away at the exposed back... that would rule it.

 

That's all I have

[Secret Agent 0]

Ok so i got have them done. Since quoting seems to rapidly be rising in popularity, i shall convert to that style. Lets roll...

 

Matt Myers with an opening promo

 

Well I thought the opening promo gave an excellent show an excellent kick off. It wraps up a short lived storyline, and shows what the future may hold. I’ll just make a choice quote from it.

 

“So yeah. I’m gunna be out of it for a while. But if anyone. And when I say anyone, I mean YOU Judge Mental. YOU! Judge Mental, YOU are the man who took my title, and now a piece of my career away from me. YOU were the one who was set on doing this. It was YOU. YOU. YOU. YOU! YOU! YOU!”

 

Had you shown up you might of kept it. Besides you took it from Judge, he took it back. As far as character wise, it gives you something to come back for after his injuries are healed.

 

SPIKE'S PROMO

 

Ok so originally i skipped over this, so i have come back to it by request. I thought this was a pretty cool little diddy, Spike. My only thoughts where it was almost all dialog. I myself prefer bits of action and descriptions of what characters feel, etc.

 

Other than that all was cool. Frost came to give some advice but ending up dishing out absolutly nothing. It humored me well as im sure it was meant to be just that.

 

Good job, Spike!

 

ELIMINATION WINDOW PAIN MATCH

“Hollywood” Spike Jenkins vs. Jack the Ripper vs. Insane Luchador vs. Dace Night

 

Dace, Dace, Dace. Looking at the match as a whole this stood out as a well constructed bit of mass mayhem. Also it gives the Window Pane match another notch of goodness. I think Frost would be proud. If only he would comment on this single match *hinthint*

 

Dace and Insane slide into the ring, fists flying as Insane and Jack brawl into a corner. Dace and Spike go face to face, fist to fist, carrying on from last time around. Crashing fists drive Jack and Spike into the turnbuckles. Whipping the out, Dace and Insane send them flying at each other. But they manage to spin around each other and charge at Dace and Insane.

Double boots to the gut, doubling Spike and Jack over. DDTs in stereo take Spike and Jack off their feet and onto the mat.

 

Say what? Ok first off I get the general idea that your going for fast paced action but this is almost a Blitzkrieg! It gives a good ‘Jumping straight into the action’ feel, but I think it also confused me a bit on the lack of description. But that’s just me…

 

 

Picking up a chair, Dace opens it up, and set it down on the mat. Picking Insane back up, Dace turns, wrapping his arm around Insane's head, and runs, pulling Insane behind him. Flying from his feet Dace lands in front of the chair, and pulls Insane's head down, smashing his jaw off the back of the chair.

 

After reading this segment I found myself rubbing my jaw, imagining how painful that would be. Nice move there.

 

Throwing wild lefts and rights Spike knocks Dace back, up barely. Taking the shard of glass, Dace places it on it arm and slices a huge gash down it, as blood wells up like a fountain and begins dripping to the mat.

 

The crowd gasp and roar in shock as Spike screams and desperately tries to scramble out of the ring.

 

LOL! Spike is a pansy!

 

At any rate, this was a sweet match Dace! I loved the sick finish, it fit so well for this match. I don’t know much about CzW so I can’t say anything like others have. Good match, keep it up.

 

Judge promo puts the crowd to sleep

 

Just kidding. This actually a cool little promo here. It serves it’s purpose well, which is to introduce the basic knowledge that there IS a SJL M7, and Judge is in it! You make intrigue for the other matches by the way you end this which I give much kudos to.

 

“You should show some respect for your World Champion. At least I didn’t get there with assistance.”

 

The crowd gives some cheap heat at the smack at Matt while King nods his head. “It took me two weeks to get this belt back, and I had to pin everyone in the way to win it. And what did the last champion do? Lose. Over and over again. I beat the man twice, and then I had to carry him through his match with MVS. Even when he held the belt, it was always obvious who the real champion was.”

 

Judge RUBS it in bigtime! Man who’s the heel and who’s the face. This is rather amusing if I can say so myself. I don’t see many instances where the face has to get assistance to win. I always assumed faces never loose big matches, they are screwed, cheated, etc. But it was Judge who was screwed… Even if he got him back ten fold.

 

I loved the reaction when Judge drops his robe to reveal his T-shirt, simply cool. Like I said above this was a wonderful promo that begins what could be an awesome angle/storyline, and you end it to where we have to read the rest of the show to find out the rest. Two thumbs up!

 

Wildchild vs. MVS

 

I couldn’t really find anything to quote that wasn’t already used WC. This match was hell a cool! The only part I didn’t really like was the fact that you jobbed again. It makes sense but how many times is Ejiro going to cost WC a match before WC cost Ejiro the European title? Match was well written, high energy, and a fun read!

 

I’ll finish these Comments up later and edit in some quotes for the Wildchild match to the finish of the show. I'm just tired today.

[Secret Agent 0]

Ok umm... JUDGE. You forgot to coment on my match. All i have heard so far is "Damn, you won!"