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[Guest The Superstar]

I'll leave my own feedback later, but I just wanted to say that I've been along for the ride for 11 of the 12 months we've been in existance, and I've loved every minute of it. Thanks to everyone for making the first year such a great experience, and here's to MANY more

[Guest Sandman9000]

Congrats on making it to a year y'all.

 

The one thing I really noticed was in Zsasz's match. You never change the way in which you write. What I mean is, take the spot where Reject and Gladiator go off the top of the cell through a table. Now, that is considered an insane spot and is something which you would want to draw attention to. Instead, it just blends in, like "hey, by the way, Reject and Gladiator went off the cell." If you notice in other matches, big spots or moments, the ones in which people need to see, are usually capitalized, since it sticks out and attracts attention. Just something you might want to take into consideration in the future.

 

Other then that, good job y'all.

 

And I am overly pleased that BPP is crippled. Sucker deserved it.

[Guest ShooterJay]

Um, where's the promo I wrote? I don't see it anywhere.

[Guest caboose]

A year?!

Fucking hell do I need to get a life.

[Guest AndrewisyourHero]

You need to get a life..when I came in here today, my post count was 367..now look at it

[Guest Big Poppa Popick]

Okay, sorry about that Jay, I thought I had edited it in..it was in my word copy but somehow didnt copy over when I posted

 

its in there now

 

feedback later, sleep now

[Guest ShooterJay]

It's ok, BPP, no worries. Thanks.

[Guest Zack Malibu]

Happy Anniversary To Yoooooooooou...

 

Happy Anniversary To Yoooooooooou...

 

BPP took a Pop Drop

 

And his neck snapped in two!

 

Haha, seriously, great to see that we've made it this far. Good things are to come (cough HeldDOWN cough). As always, great effort by everyone, keep that motivation flowin'!

[Guest Big Poppa Popick]

wrong

 

on so many levels

 

wrong

[Guest Tony149]

I only scrolled through the show -- hope to start reading the whole show(s) when the split starts -- but it's been one helluva year. Who would of thought the OAOAST would be born after AS got mad he didn't become a Mod? Then again, who would of thought a simple thread would turn into a popular underground parody e-fed?

 

One thing's for sure, the OAOAST has had a wild ride over the past year; with the return of HeldDOWN on 4-10, and with the idea of making the show more like the OAOAST (thread), the shows will get wilder.

[The Dames 0]

Personally, I felt the interactions between myself and AS were pretty poor...but then again, I didn't get to write any of it.

 

Popick never told me the deadline and asked me to write it an hour and a half before it was due.

 

Dames

[LaParkaYourCar 0]

Is there anyway to fix it so I don't have to scroll from right to left the whole time while reading it?

[Guest Big Poppa Popick]

change your text size

 

if youre using netscape its view, text, then choose the zoom on the text

 

and dames, AngleSault is a very sarcastic individual, so i went with that direction... Again, sorry that you didnt know the deadline, but its always posted in whatever booking thread is created after the last show...for general purposes its 9pm on monday night

 

=)

 

but still, its a good show for a year

[Guest What?]

I was in the ME?

 

 

 

I WAS IN THE ME!~

 

 

HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA!!

 

 

I lost, though...

 

 

I WAS IN THE ME!!

[Guest SP-1]

Good show overall.

[LaParkaYourCar 0]

Great show.

 

I loved the split graphic at the end.

[Guest Lightning Flik]

You know, I might wanna think about getting a graphic for The Slacker, but that would require work and of course The Slacker wouldn't care for unneeded work.

 

Unless he gets paid double.

 

As for the show, great job you guys. And Mario sorry about the Dungeon. At least it got shown one last time before it imploded on itself.

[LaParkaYourCar 0]

I loved the Slacker stuff. That was great.

[Guest j.o.b. squad]

walks into the thread with his co number 3 draft pick trophey

 

good show

 

we're number three we're number three we're number three

[Guest Kotzenjunge]

Notice how much cooler the HD side looked than the IZ side? I think my selection of Neo as my graphic dude was genius.

 

Also, where will the developing story with Shattered Dreams and the Boogie Knights go? How will the Dream Machines address it? TUNE INTO HeldDOWN~! TO FIND OUT!!!

[Guest Lightning Flik]

I loved the Slacker stuff. That was great.

My complaint about The Slacker is that he seemingly was too God damned smart. I mean, come on. He's supposed to be slacking off, not some cool kick ass bastard that also get himself handed night in and night out. ...oh wait, that last part is actually right, so he's got it half right in that instance. Although he's gotta strive to be slackier, I tell ya. Slackier.

 

And what was with him in that promo? My God, I've heard better acting from a true ghey person wrassling (ie: Jeff Hardy). Wow is all I gotta say. I mean absolutely, great stuff with the characterization and stuff as it nails it to a tee. (Note: I never touched the promo so I'm giving props to VS as it was good and yes, I've read it before )

 

[/markdom]

 

 

Now in all seriousness, great show. Props to everyone involved and I'll do a better read of it when I get some time (currently having pains with the knees, so I'm trying to keep this brief). I do have a true complaint about the show though. What was up with the drafting? No offense, but um, shouldn't we kinda be going by in ring names? Not the actual user names? Or am I just nitpicking?

 

Oh, and Kotz, thanks for the praise for being cool. I'm so happy that ya like me. I hope to keep it up.

[Guest TheZsaszHorsemen]

What was that big-ass match in the beginning about? That sucked ass!

 

 

Seriously, I want to thank everyone for a great run so far. I hope everyone involved liked what I did, as I am very proud of it.

[Guest Big Poppa Popick]

aside from 1 guy, those were everyones ring names

[Guest Plushy Al Logan]

Here is the missing promo from last week that me and Lightning Flik worked on:

 

AHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

 

“Crazy Train” plays, and Mario stumbles out to the ring drunkly.  He only gets in the ring and offers no blood to the audience.  He grabs the microphone.

 

Fact #1:  Despite being a fairly decent writer, Mario has failed English 101 four times.

Fact #2:  Mario is almost as bad as his character.

 

[Jesse and J.R. complain about the smell of alcohol]

 

Mario:  I’ll admit it, I was beaten fairly last night, don’t worry I’ll keep my promise.  I have only one monster at my side.  I also negotiated a deal with the OAOAST top guys to let three of my fired guys stay.  Don’t worry he wont get in the ring, he’ll just do commentary with J.R. and Jesse.

 

[Commentators worry]

 

Mario:  I’ll tell you all later.  I have another reason for standing here in this ring, this is not the same fucking OAOAST I left eight months ago!  It’s bullshit!  We have a Jesse Ventura wannabe, a preppy, and Big Poppa Poopick running things here, and I think it fucking sucks here now.  Seriously, the only reason why I’m still here is because I get paid a salary higher than any of you pissants will ever see.  The name sucks to, come on, Anglesault thread!  Since when did ‘Sault become such a pussy and let these guys take over.  The ‘Sault I knew would have held everyone down and taken all the titles, and his only friends would have been called the Evolution or something.  ‘Sault doesent have the balls to hold me down, or anyone here.

 

[Jesse and J.R. take offense]

 

Mario:  Don’t be wrong about the newbies, I love them very much too.  I can only offer one warning, don’t drop the soap, because whatcha gonna do when the OAOAST Executives run wild on you!

 

Mario poses.

 

[backsatge]

OAOAST Executives look at each other nervously

 

[The Ring]

Mario is outside standing on the commentator’s table.  Mario is grabbing his crotch.

 

Mario:  How many of you want to see it?!

 

Audience cheers

 

Mario:  Really who wants to see it?!

 

Louder cheers.

 

Mario:  All right!! Here I go!!

 

Mario unzips his pants, and takes out his penis.

 

[Whoever is doing commentary, insert any joke you want in here]

 

Mario pisses on Jesse and J.R.

 

Mario:  I’ am the Lizard King!  I can don anything, and you can’t stop me!

 

Mario finishes and gets back in the ring.

 

Mario:  That was a great example of what I can do!  Who’s going to stop me?!

 

Mario blasts a camera man with lightning.

 

Mario:  Who’s going to stop me?!  What are you going to do about it?!  Who’s going to stop me?!  What are you going to do about it?!  Who’s going to stop me?!  What are you going to do about it?!  Who’s going to stop me?!  What are you going to do about it?!  Who’s going to stop me?!  What are you going to do about it?!  Who’s going to fucking stop me?!

 

"Back Up" by 12 Stones blasts out of the speakers and under the OaOast-tron appears a shadowy figure. He walks out from under the the tron and into the light.

 

J.R.: Who could this be?

 

Jesse: Do you think I have a clue?

 

Out from under the tron appears a young man. About in his early twenties, five feet ten inches, and all the looks of the average joe. Yet, if you saw him in the street you know who he is instantly from everything else about him.

 

His hair was fiery red that glinted like copper in the light of arena, yet you wouldn't know it from the red ballcap, with the word "Slacker" on it in blue. In total contrast with the hat, his blue t-shirt had a azure wyvern on it that is breath silver fire all over the shirt. But at least the shirt went along with his Levi's blue jeans and blue Nike Shox.

 

For some reason all this just gave him this aura of cockiness and brazen glorified snobbish attitude. Or perhaps it was the fact that he just gave out a chuckle into the mircophone that he had in his ready hand. It appears he's about to speak, and thus the crowd hushes into silence as the rogue begins to talk.

 

???: Who's gonna stop ya? Hell, if I were someone important like... Anglesault~!

 

Audience cheers at the name.

 

???: Angle-Plex~!

 

Audience cheers again at yet another name.

 

???: Or maybe even Tony "The Body"~!

 

Audience yet pops once more. Why? Cause they love their favorites.

 

???: ...but I'm not them, nor do I really care about what you are doing right now~! Go on, continue to piss away your career into nothingness by proving that you ain't nothing to no one. As by Slacking Off© from being a true competitor, you are truly proving that you aren't anything but a complete waste of time.

 

The audience begins to chant boos towards the newcomer.

 

J.R.: This kid is asking to have himself get killed.

 

However J.R.'s partner at the booth is just laughing away at what this vagabound had said about Mario.

 

Jesse: ...don't look that way at me J.R.. I'm laughing my ass off at this kid doesn't know what he's asking for.

 

Mario just stands there. He glares at the young man in utter shock, disbelief and absolute rage. Some punk was trying to upshow him. HIM~! Although, this kid didn't know what he was getting into... Oh no, he most definitely did not.

 

Mario: Just who the hell do you think you are talking too? I'am God here! I beat up on little bitches like you for a mid-afternoon like workout!  Then after that I feed my opponents to my monsters, I’m asking you nicely to get the fuck out of here jobber!

 

???: My name is of no relevance to you... Just know that I'm known as The Slacker. I'm the best at Slacking Off© and frankly your pathetic attempts to do so are a mockery to the art.

 

Mario:  Why does no one take me seriously, I’ve been here since the beginning, and even a mere jobber wants to speak up against me!!  Get in the ring motherfucker, and tell me what you just said!!

 

Mario holds the ropes open for the mystery guy.

 

A sadistic, cunning and terribly evil smirk appears on Slacker's face. He brings the mic upwards and speaks once again.

 

Slacker: ...sorry. As much fun as I'm sure it'll be to repeat everything I just said, I'm afraid that I'm not one for having to do anymore work than I have to. So I'm afraid you'll just have to amuse yourself with your pathetic acts of humor for these shortminded idiots.

 

As the Slacker proceeds to leave, the fans yell at him "CHICKEN SHIT!!!". The Slacker continues on as if none of it matters. Just before he heads under the tron, he pauses once again and speaks once more.

 

Slacker: If you were to say... Get a match against me, I'd be more than happy to not only tell you what I think of your small attempts of humor, I'll also give you a true Slack Off© to remember.

 

Mario:  All right, you have your match, but it’s a Mario Logan rules match.  AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!  Dungeon of Doom theme plays for some reason, Mario gets out of the ring and heads to the back.

[Guest The Superstar]

Great show.

 

I loved the split graphic at the end.

Except for one GLARING OMISSION~

[Guest TheZsaszHorsemen]

Congrats on making it to a year y'all.

 

The one thing I really noticed was in Zsasz's match. You never change the way in which you write. What I mean is, take the spot where Reject and Gladiator go off the top of the cell through a table. Now, that is considered an insane spot and is something which you would want to draw attention to. Instead, it just blends in, like "hey, by the way, Reject and Gladiator went off the cell." If you notice in other matches, big spots or moments, the ones in which people need to see, are usually capitalized, since it sticks out and attracts attention. Just something you might want to take into consideration in the future.

 

Other then that, good job y'all.

 

And I am overly pleased that BPP is crippled. Sucker deserved it.

Eh, before now I wasn't even sure I could DO a 6-Way match, if that's the only misstep I made; I'll take it.

[Guest Chuck Woolery]

That's not just a misstep, Zsasz. If you're writing a big match you need to make your big spots mean something, and build to them. If you're throwing a cell bump away like nothing, it's going to hurt your match overall. You have to sell the big spots as though they're big spots - you can't have me punching you have the same description as me piledriving you off of a scaffold through four barbed-wire covered flaming tables. It kills your match.

 

- Mike.

[Patty O'Green 0]

The split graphic was cool, except I don't want to be represented by Vega any more! I want to be represented by Christian. Otherwise it was a really nice graphic and it's currently wallpaper on my desktop

[Guest NaturalBornThriller4:20]

Excellent Show.

 

But, what happen to my "Promo"

 

Did I send it too late ?

[Guest Lightning Flik]

aside from 1 guy, those were everyones ring names

Um... Flik was used when talking about me. So that's why I'm asking is that what I'm using in OAOAST? Did I miss a memo from head office telling me that I must revert from The Slacker to Lightning Flik?

 

Because it wasn't The Slacker being added to the heldDOWN~! roster, I was called Flik... That's why I brought it up.

 

Oh wait. You said asides from one guy, which would have to be me. Ok, nevermind then.