From The Fire comments thread

[King Cucaracha 0]

Card is being worked on as we speak, which'd be easier if those who haven't given definate yes or nos actually, you know, did. You know who you are.

 

Meanwhile, enjoy!

[Dace59 0]

Right, hopefully, I shall ready the show in full and leave a few comments. I miss giving my stupid full show comments actually. And a few more detailed ones on the triple threat I marked.

[Retard Girl 0]

so far, from what i have read...

 

 

 

 

“You ever use one of her videos before?” King asks.

 

“Lord yes, and my BUTT has never looked better in a bikini!”

 

 

 

 

 

and Krista's random utterances were awesome.

[Toxxic 0]

Va'aiga/IL and Tom/Annie (such as it is) are up.

[Mad Scientist 0]

Va'aiga/IL and Tom/Annie (such as it is) are up.

 

Is it bad that I actually marked out a little for the Return of President Ramu?

[Dace59 0]

Right, general crappy comments. I'll stick the matches. Proper indepth on request/me being poked/bribed.

 

Krista Isadora Duncan vs. Aaron Starr :-

 

So, we have someone with experience it seems. A fun little number, keeping it all simple and balanced action. I like the writing style, easy to follow, well described and all. All in all, a solid match and I don't see anything really wrong with it on my first read through. Only my personal view that the first falls of a match generally shouldn't start at a two count. Though, that's only a worry for longer matches and holding build. So welcome aboard and stuff.

 

 

S.I.N vs. Johnathan Clarke :-

 

Another solid number, going for the back and forth thing again. Good read and I didn't see the win coming. Good eye for an eye race to the finish as well, for short match. Both guys got control sections, etc. Again, nothing jarring or bad about this one. So we're on a roll so far.

 

 

MANSON vs. Taiga Star vs. The Fabulous Jakey :-

 

Right, slightly more rambling because I marked this one. Now, personally I think triple threats are a pain to write (less so if you mix them up with elmination or tag in rules). So we have the old, someone is laided out then breaks up the pin style. But it's not bad. Again the starting counts and two. And I think some of the language isn't as... forceful and action-y at the start of the match. But it builds nicely, mostly keeping things to simple spots at start, before a big, indy style everyone drops bombs and bounces finish. But it's balanced and was fun read for a messy triple threat. So that's all good. Though i want to see how Taiga handles a singles match now. To MANSON, you have the more refined style of course, though I really didn't like wiping Taiga out for most of the match. But like I said, triple threats are an arse to write well in my book. So if it had been one one, you probably would have taken it is my guess.

 

 

Alan Clark vs. Dance Dance Dragon :-

 

I like King's line in the intro. Again, I can't write good stuff like that and I have a spot for silly opening comments. Not really key to winning, but they're a nice touch that's part of the fed's style. Pretty nice match, showing Alan off as the vet, being in charge and going for the kill, while Dance Dragon show boats. And seemed to have a really long race to the finish, pretty much from the missed double stomp and I didn't see the end coming that was good. As was the hitting the cartwheel spot the second time. The actuall finish was a little out of nowhere, but doesn't really spoil the nice build. Good stuff.

 

 

Va'aiga vs. The Insane Luchador :-

I've just aid Va'aiga's losing match and liked it of course, so this is good. And hey, hardcore fun. It's all violent, nice spots. I like the end turning spot with the hidden light tubes, as I've seen seen that done before. Not much lese to said, spot, spot, fun fun. And IL is still cool, even after all these years. So people should read both matches for this one.

 

 

Tom Flesher vs Annie Onita :-

Or you know, not. But Annie is back? Awesome, if her and Tom show

 

 

Michael Alexander vs. El Hombre Sin Nombre :-

 

Coming soon

 

[Retard Girl 0]

i've been struggling to overcome the "writing as results" that i've learned in my formative efedding years, to transition to a more 'SWF' style of writing.

 

 

 

 

i just read DDD vs Alan Clark, fun stuff. for some reason i had a hard time following the action... perhaps it's the drunkness i got myself into last night. also, some choice lines of commentary.

 

"Eh, I'm barely here. I just open my mouth occassionally so they'll keep paying me."

 

 

 

"There's that look in the eyes again." notes Mak. "I kinda worry that Disney contract was the only thing keeping Clark from going off the rails sometimes."

 

"Well, there's no more contract, so you'd better hurry up and take back those derogatory comments you made about him."

 

"...ME!?"

 

 

 

 

etc.