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I like how everyone's reactions are shown to Zack's beatdown, and they all made sense to boot.

 

Brock's a monster. Cool.

 

Nice. And the feud continues. I like how 70's Dude is an actual character and not just all a joke.

 

CWM!!! I actually didn't expect that at all. Good for Zack not to completely turn his character around in a way that doesn't make sense. He's still psycho, but understandily so.

 

Nice match between Lindsay and Holly. I like how the women's division is forming. Looks good.

 

Hot segment, eh? I can only take credit for the beginning, but good job to Drek (I think) who wrote the rest.

 

Did they beginning of the Sonic/Cappa segment get cut off? And ouch, that's kinda mean to put out a cigeratte on someone's eye. Ouch.

 

HA! Funny. Sorry Krista, you can't win with the idiots.

 

The crowd may be chanting COD Scotty, but I still love you. By the way, the "You Got Served" chants rule, hard. Holy shit though, what a great match. I think it was on of the best matches I've read on HD this year. Kudos to whoever wrote it.

 

MAX

Sometimes you can be really mean, Gene.

Agreed, that was quite a burn.

 

Moutain Dew? What's with the product placing? WE'RE ALL SELLOUTS! I really found this segment funny. Post Viral Fatigue Syndrome? HA!

 

Good match to show Hoff's dominance, as it was pretty short. The powerbomb's were cool and Drek attacking was too, so, ya know, we don't forget they are facing each other.

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I guess Zack was right about the opening having an impact if there were shots of other wrestlers watching in the back. That piece was a total last-minute job. Mystery Eskimo wrote it as the lead-in to the Black T promo, I took what he wrote and added the wrestlers looking on like Zack suggested the idea.

 

Good little opening match.

 

Liked the interaction between Crystal and the OAOAST Champion Drek Stone.

 

I continue to become a big Dude fan with every show. Nice to see his feud with Calvin continuing.

 

Loved seeing Black T act like dicks concerning last week's events. Eski did a great job with the promo (and for using the stuff I sent him; one of the few times I recall us ever doing something like that), and Zack did a equally great job touching up the return of CWM. We CWM says "we're in this together now," the Raw theme song popped into my head. :) But it's good to see one of the originals, and co-creator of the OAOAST, back.

 

So far I'm enjoying the Prince Killings character.

 

I didn't think it could be done, but Patty has done an awesome job with the Women's division. It sorta reminds me of when Eski and I took over the Tag division; make something out of nothing. At least we had a top face team (GPX) to feud with, Patty's mixing and matching. Very good development with Ned and Holly, as well.

 

The Crystal/Axel/Stone/Hoff segment was great. You knew it was some sort of setup, but it was handled beautifully. I liked how Crystal toyed with his emotions, giving him a big one and then Drek attacks him from behind. The part where she gets mad at Stone for beating Axel with the chair because she wanted to get her licks in was awesome. Great stuff.

 

Well-written promo by Cappa and Sonic.

 

Another great C.O.D. promo, this time involving Krista and Johnny. But thanks to Patty for helping me write the 8 person tag. I had never co-wrote a match before, so I was a bit nervous on how things would go. I shouldn't have because Patty was very helpful throughout. I was so exhausted writing the match, the post-match activities wasn't as crisp as I would of liked it to have been, but I'm very pleased with the match. Which ranks up there with my C.O.D.-BT match as my favorite.

 

Nice to see us bring back the AM Moment segment. It was something I wanted to do for a few weeks but never did, so props to whoever did that. Like the ad joked about, we really need to decided whether the show is on the 27th or 3rd. Zack?!

 

AM is stacked. I think there's, like, 10-12 matches set with the addition of Axel-Crystal.

 

Fine Love Doctors promo.

 

I liked how Rodez made sure the camera got a shot of his Mountain Drew. Oh yeah, good promo.

 

I'll read the ME tomorrow. Just wanted to get in a big chuck of the feedback done tonight. Good show.

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I liked the opening to this show alot. It was just all around cool. For those wondering where The 70s Dude was, well he left the building by then. He was hitting up the McDonalds Dollar Menu most likely.

 

I usually don't comment about anything I write myself because that seems real conceided, but I enjoyed writing the Brock and Jumbo match. Neither characters are of my own creation so beyond the fact I was trying to do them justice, I also wanted to see if I could succesfully hype up Hoff's main event match, later without taking away from this match.

 

CRYSTAL

….I say I can’t wait for you to explain.

I hear that Crystal's biggest fan is actually Fongus Bellpop. Nice promo and it will be fun to see how those two work together.

 

Nice promo from Black-T. I guess Malibu has one hell of an HMO to heal that fast. Nice to have CWM back.

 

I'll finish reading and doing feedback for those that did feedback last week sometime tommorow. At this point I'd like to sleep.

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I liked the opening to this show alot. It was just all around cool. For those wondering where The 70s Dude was, well he left the building by then. He was hitting up the McDonalds Dollar Menu most likely.

 

I usually don't comment about anything I write myself because that seems real conceided, but I enjoyed writing the Brock and Jumbo match. Neither characters are of my own creation so beyond the fact I was trying to do them justice, I also wanted to see if I could succesfully hype up Hoff's main event match, later without taking away from this match.

 

CRYSTAL

….I say I can’t wait for you to explain.

I hear that Crystal's biggest fan is actually Fongus Bellpop. Nice promo and it will be fun to see how those two work together.

 

Nice promo from Black-T. I guess Malibu has one hell of an HMO to heal that fast. Nice to have CWM back.

 

I'll finish reading and doing feedback for those that did feedback last week sometime tommorow. At this point I'd like to sleep.

Zack wasn't totally healed, hence why Black T quickly were able to gain the advantage. It even makes note that he's stitched up and bruised up.

 

The deal right now with Zack is that he's pretty much been beaten at his own game, and Black T know they have him cornered because for one thing, NOBODY likes him. CWM's arrival is just a marriage of convienience if you read the promo following the save. They're not best buddies, and won't be, but have a common goal in mind in dethroning Black T. CWM's stroking his ego as it pertains to being an original. Zack's out for blood for having his spilt, and out for vengeance for his girlfriend.

 

To shift Zack immediately from egotistical loose cannon to bouncing babyface once again would ruin the last year of stories told.

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I should have gone old school and brought out the old In Crowd "Zack Malibu Stunt Doubles" that were always on hand so we could no sell everything. Of course this is when Mario thought Deebo lopping off CWM's head and playing dodgeball with Jason Voorhees was the "in" thing, so there was a LOT of no selling being done by us.

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Don't give him ideas.

 

Anyway.

 

Cool opening. Very cool. It's nice to show events affecting the whole roster, rather than us all running our seperate storylines.

 

A good big man match between Brock and Jumbo. I like matches that arent necessarily advancing an angle, adds to the sports of sports ent.

 

Crystal and Drek have an EVIL plan. Well done. I imagine the characters having good chemistry too.

 

Backstage assault! Im looking forward to Dude-Calvin II. I wonder what, if any, stips they'll use.

 

The Black T/Zack segment ended up with writing from all three of us, and I think its pretty damn good. Keep watching kids!

 

The Zack/CWM interaction was excellent too. No sudden face-face buddyness, which I like. And even a Derek The Fish reference.

 

I didn't like this Prince Killings promo quite as much as his first one, but it still worked well. His first match should be interesting.

 

Ow, Neddy Bear tarnished a good match, the bastard. Holly continuing to look impressive, anyways.

 

And now I have to go out. More later, I hope.

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To delve deeper into the whole Black-T promo it made them look like heartless assholes and that's a good thing. If we're going for realism though then ZacH(hehehe) should have probably been away for a week to sell the injuries.

 

I read more of the show but from what I can tell it was done by people that didn't feedback last week so nothing to say on that. I'm up to the 8-man Tag and I'll read it later.

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And even a Derek The Fish reference.

I miss Derek The Fish.

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Crystal and Axel at AngleMania? My money is on Crystal.

 

Enjoyable Lurve Doctors promo. I pictured a patient getting up midway through surgery, seeing Pigley and in a foggy state telling him he sucked.

 

Ewwwwwww. Mountain Dew? I see Hoff's influence is spreading like Wild Fire. Well hopefully Drek puts a stop to that by beating him at AngleMania and thus saving us all from his influence of bad soda, starting with Rodez. Speaking of Rodez...defending the X-Title against The 70s Dude next week~ Be there or be square~!

 

Well that be all the feedback I need to leave this week. So there ya go.

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ZacH(hehehe)

I just noticed this....

 

 

 

 

 

Jackass.

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Nice opening, as most everyone has said. I too liked the various reactions. Anything that brings multiple people into the same angle is cool. ...You know what I mean.

 

Patty, we gotta talk about these theme song choices, man.

 

Drek Stone is teh slimeball. SLAMBALL. I am so tired. I'm liking this, though. It seems a natural partnership.

 

If I was a fan I'd be the fan who cheers Black T. They're so right! I loved this promo. The line about scratching backs and then stabbing them was cool. I did think it was weird that Black T got a mic after beating Zack down -- I thought it kind of hurt the flow a little. But, minor complaint in the grand scheme. CWM coming back was great. The following Zack/CWM altercation made a lot of sense and tied it together for me. REALLY great speech by CWM.

 

Cute cocky promo by Killings but it seemed...kind of generic. I dunno, I'm not saying the Hoff character is cutting edge, but this just seemed like a bland promo I've seen before. Cute, and clever, but it fell a little flat for me.

 

Hot women's match, a lot of action, I liked it, and that's all I got to say about that. This line seemed odd though:

 

- "CABOOSE

Lindsay spent the majority of the match targeting the neck, but she could never hit a killer move to put Holly away. A good showing from The First Lady of the LC!"

 

Huh? Seemed contradictory. Maybe I'm reading it wrong, dunno. I wouldn't usually nitpick one line but I was confused. Anyway, COLD promo by Ned. I was into it.

 

I thought Coach's reaction to the new Crystal was odd. I figured he'd still kind of like her. I understand what the dynamic was, but still it felt odd. But it was a really good segment. Crystal FOOOOOOOLED Axel, and then Drek sort of appeared out of nowhere but it's all good. And then the ratings spiked as you-know-who came out, and whichever of you slugs wrote this (NYU?) did well in showing all the various hostilities. I loved the champ and both contenders laid out.

 

It did seem like we missed a Cappa promo somewhere BUT...I liked this "Sonic Youth" guy. I'm already looking forward to this feud and that's cool. Cappa's the kind of heel that I *like* but I like booing....if that makes sense.

 

The...International House of Hatercakes. Uh-huh.

 

I really enjoyed this eight-person tag. My issue with tag matches is I can never get everybody involved enough, to my liking. This didn't suffer from that, or at least didn't feel that way. A lot of back and forth. The T-Bod Shining Wizard was a trip, but as long as it's not a permanent thing it made for a good spot. Four leaf Cloverleaf was cool. Good finish building up to Anglemania, and I might have to agree with CC, it's prolly the best HD match of '05.

 

Nice bit putting over Crystal's new character, but the announcement of Axel/Crystal, I felt, should have been bigger.

 

GREAT Docs promo, well-written, and I like the direction they're going.

 

Rodez and Josie's bit was cute, very funny, and good hype for the X match. I haven't read the Rando bit yet, but I appreciate it's there.

 

So yeah.

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Because it’s a lot easier, I’ll do Mascot’s technique of feedbacking.

 

It seems like Rodez is hitting on Josie. Is that going to be the storyline for the Joy of X match, K.Money coming in to kick the stuffing out of the dude who keeps trying to get in his girl’s bonezone? I never knew Rando was an X champ, but now there’s documentation to prove it! As an aside, I thought there was a weight limit on the X Title. The Dude’s a fatty but he’s getting a shot. I wouldn’t bother to even bring this up, but I thought the only reason the 24/7 Title existed was because of the weight limit on the X Title. Oh well, don’t bother me none if it means more opponents for the belt.

 

Speaking of the 24/7 title whatever happened to the D.O.C? You can’t create a talking robot then leave us hanging!

 

I thought the Ausstin/Jumbo match would make a nice opener, so I put it there. Ausstin F-5ing a dude that big is a cool visual. Unless you’re brain dead. Then I guess you can’t really visualize anything, can ya.

 

Mean Gene is even creepier then Cole. And he has a foot fetish. Gross! I like the idea of the Doc’s having to work(literally) their way back up. I bet they just say screw it and try to weasel their way onto the AM card.

 

I enjoy Crystal heel’s persona. I repeat my Crystal 4 Champ cries of last week.

 

Because I’ve got insider knowledge that’s off the mu’fuckin chain, I knew CWM was on the way back months ago. The Black T promo was great as was the backstage skit with Zack and the C Note. I hope he doesn’t mind if I call him The C Note.

 

Yeah, the 8 man match was the best HD~! match this year. And I say that only because I wrote half of it. And not the hard half either. Work smart, not hard is a motto that I live by. Tony did a nice job on his piece of the match.

 

The Youth/Cappa segment has been corrected. Apologies for screwing it up.

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Because it’s a lot easier, I’ll do Mascot’s technique of feedbacking.

You may not want to. If somebody doesn't feedback you one week and then they see you feedbacking others they may just go and feedback everybody else out of spite to slap you in the face. Can't play favorites.

 

Where's the love for the Dude promo? :(

 

Also did I get everything you did this week? There didn't seem to be anything that read like a crazy Patty creation.

 

Edit: Oh wait, you said you wrote half of the 8-man. I don't know which half you wrote but I did enjoy it. It was a nice first half of the show Main Event that furthered the GPX and COD feud heading into AngleMania. I wonder if this is the only fed to have a Wiggers vs Lesbians match for the Tag Titles.

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Not a slap in the face, Frig, but a subtle reminder that sometimes people get behind a week or two. Y'know.

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Even though Mascot's comment about slaps in the face was directed at me I don't think it was directed at me, per se. I'm perceptive like that.

 

I'll leave Hoff some quick feedback seeing that he left some this week and I don't wanna get slapped in the face anymore then I have to:

 

This Cage match was good but a lil short, but Hoff was under the weather, so we're lucky we even got it in. I'm sad (well as sad as you can be over an e-fed) that Chris Stevens jobbed. We're wasting the potential of Stevens! Still the after match beatdown by Hoff was cool and its good to see the world champion looking strong. I also am pleased by Hoff's use of the code function. Keep it up!

 

I wonder if this is the only fed to have a Wiggers vs Lesbians match for the Tag Titles.

 

I do believe so! On the subject of odd feuds and angles, I recently heard that a fed in Japan made a ladder their world champion, and then held a retirement ceremony for said ladder. It reminds me of an idea I had to have Alix job the tag team titles to a can of Sprite and a back issue of Entertainment Weekly to turn heel on Krista.

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EW/Krista could hit ***** if given enough time. You do know that Hoff isn't the champ, right?

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I'm sure he was talking about me.

 

I mean, how could he not?

 

And sign on AIM once in a while. It'd be good to actually, you know, have a plan for this week.

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Hoff looked like a man possessed with all those powerbombs. Hopefully its sold with Stevens not being on tommorow night's show. I was happy with the fact that if Drek was going to get involved it was after the match and not during it. All the action was good but I liked the first one better. Pretty hard to top yourself anyways so that's not an insult.

 

With that I'm gone until AngleMania.

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It's just a jest.

 

I loved what Frig did to hype the match, although hopefully Brock's next match focuses more on him. The backstage promo was classic Dude, as much as he can have classic stuff this early, and the feud was built nicely. I'm a little drunk so apologies if this doesn't make sense.

 

And Frig, I'm sorry for being a dick earlier. Hey everyone else, leave that alone, mind your business.

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It took me nearly a week, but I finally got around to reading the main event. It was pretty damn good considering the conditions Hoff wrote it under. The ending with Hoff going nuts on Stevens then getting nailed from behind by the World Champion was nicely done, and like FM said, I'd liked how Stone got involved after the match instead of during.

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