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Wow! I don't know who no showed, but awesome show!

 

I will add better commenst when i actually read the whole thing instead of skimming, but... ZENON HEEL TURN!!! That was very well done!

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Haven't read through the whole show yet, but just a few character notes on my part, since I caught them while reading the ladder match:

 

1)I wouldn't come down to the ring with a cocky smirk just like MVS. I'd just look focused, with a cold glare. The signature part of my entrance (clutching my cross and pointing to the sky) was also left out.

 

2)A spot was written where Johnny grabbed me by the hair. Cortez has closely cropped hair, not long or even semi-long hair where that would be possible.

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Zack, if there were any glaring character errors, I probably wrote them; sorry. I haven't written in almost a month, and didn't really take a close look at anyone's stats.

 

:: wipes egg off of face ::

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Time for my fairly usual comments:

 

Please note, I'm just experimenting with tossing in star ratings to see how it goes. Just ignore them if they seem like crap, I probably wont have them right.

 

Evil ass opening promo, playing on slightly out of kayfabe comments and some lovely twisting of how wrestlers feel about the normal action of a match. Nice history stuff with the M7 as well. Very evil stuff from Flesher. ***1/2

 

Nice little bit about Comet taking his mask off for the opeing match. Starts off pretty brawling, but it's not bad by any means. Tad description light, but soild. Usal triple threat finisher finisher ending. But from Sly, he's showing, he's winning and he writes well. **

 

Boo and hiss at the DNS. Nice evil punishment though. 1/2*

 

And the fictional commeraicls continue, I always like those little touches. Good promo, relfects on stuff, like Superkicking Clark too hard as he later lost the title. And the president jokes. Sweet build up, really driving hype into the match. ***

 

Nice old school heel duck out and little pysch up start. Hot start, with the beatings and the run it shots showing the build and hatred between Clark and Maddix. Really good trades with Maddix jumping in to save Todd. The shootish line about Coy and Ejiro was another like little winky winky touch it's good to see in matches without being out of place. It's all simple but affective, the leg work form Todd, Half Crab, grab the ropes only for Maddix to kick Coy's hand, another classic. And then we have the Tag Rope Choking. [Aside, the Fed seems to be getting very old school lately, and we're keeping tag teaming alive damn it!] Playing off Maddix/Tryst as Megan saves her team from a big dive. Clark gets some payback with a Superkick off his on, but only on Todd. It builds towards the PPV and was a really good soild match. ***1/2

 

Neat promo from Toxxic, picking up on classic UK/US things, and I do mark for the stuff about the French. And more Toxxic/Aecas stuff. Futhur carrying on the saga and also building Terrence/Janus stuff. I love the whole ghost thing going on. Janus + Gabriel = many dead peple. **1/2

 

Now onto Said vs Toxxic [man with show seems long]. Toxxic is bascily the deafult face, but doesn't over do it. Really fast start, usal crusier stuff. The interlaced commentatry and action carries it over well. The two out posing each other is a fun little element. The punch combo clotheslines get traded off, keeping it pretty simple, with the roll ups from Toxxic leading into roll ups from Said. No great plan, but for a Heel/Heel match it worked, and works very well for Said. **1/4

 

Me and Aecas kill Cutthroat and Teddy 'I'm a twat and I'm pissing on the family name' Hart. DUD but such a fun one.

 

Another evil promo from Flesher as the games go on. I do like all this with Allison. **1/4

 

Little promo from W&D just to hype the tag title match. Nothing great, but good old hype. *1/4

 

Huge build up promo between Clark and Maddix. Massive drama and relaly big hype. Awesome stuff. ****

 

Tag Title Match now... big fast opening as that's everyone's playbook. Niec crowd popping stuff from WC to open. Slighty OTT clusterfuck if attacks. But it's a ladder match as the rapid spots continue, both Johhny and Cortex stay down long enough from their two big ish moves, gives it more tension. More mention of selling and such a talked comment on Johnny's last match, good thing. Transistions are spoty, but this is a clearly defined spot fest, and they keep the pace and still keep in line with selling seen earlier on. Wild and Dangerous pretty much kill the in crowd, though it's not totally one sided. Good spot match. **3/4

 

Big evil promo about Janus and Kibagami. Evilness around, and build up. *1/4

 

And it's Janus coming up to bate against the River Dragon. Brawling at each other, both big evil characters just taking it to each other. Almost feeling epic in some places, with big spikes of impact. Shifting back and forth as they just unleash on each other. Both of them fighting through big impact just to come back with their own big hits. Janus finally just crushes the life out of Kibagami. A big hate filled match, with the action telling that story rather that one in ring story. **1/2

 

And after the match Zenon comes in and kills Kibs completely with some help from Janus....ohh...more evilness.

 

Zenon vs Kibagami just boils over in the promo. Alex is just loosing in. With just is just evil to the core. These guys are both insane. Just damn... ****

 

Finally to the main event. Start off with the obvious build for Grappler/Duran, these two guys feeling it out, just adding to building tension. And that changes into Flesher/Onita, to keep the build pace going. Ann starts of strong but gets beaten down and out wrestled by Flesher, who's back in his great uber heel roll and he builds up by crushing Ann. And making her tag in Grappler is another excellent touch. Then a role reversal as Grappler attacks, small payoff for Ann's punishment. More beating on Tom which switches back to him out wrestling and destorying Onita again. Then Duran takes over the dismantling job. Duran's attack is just as nasty as Tom's and severs to make him look like he could do just as much to Grappler at the PPV. After playing off the Running Knee Strike into the steps from Duran/Danny the faces are incontrol at last. Austin/Michaels style kick, caught, spun, kick wham finisher. Big tease as Duran breaks it up. Tom finally crushes Annie with an Ego Buster. Huge build to then PPV, hot match, great action, very good story. **** MOTN

 

And just a final closing promo to round it off, show how on edge Zenon is and fix Flesher/Onita PPV match. *1/2

 

A job very well done people.

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Guest Evolution

About the running knee strike, there was actually supposed to be a show promo with a Duran/Annie confrontation that would basically be Duran saying "I don't know what Tom's motives are, but I do know this: Tonight is the night I finish what I started at the Fight Before Christmas."

 

The running knee was supposed to be a reference to that, trying to smash the face of Annie again, but it obviously didn't work this time and it led to the hot tag.

 

Much thanks for the high rating though, Dace. Tom had a really strong first half and I knew I had to be just as strong as the second half, and I think it turned out very well.

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Ahhh, right, ok on that one then. It's just I didn't remember back to FBC, and just remembered Danny have you try the same stuff against him.

 

But yer, it was a very good match.

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Thanks for the love on teh hype promo, Dace. Took me a good bit of time to work all the kinks out of and to give it the feel I wanted.

 

 

 

And about Todd...I *did* see him on the boards yesterday, for a little while too. But I am unsure about his showingness (as I didn't see him on AIM all day)

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We would have liked to do more to put the In Crowd over, but that word limit's a muh-fucka (particularly considering the stip).

That's OK, you'll get yours in the Triple Quadruple Match, muahahahahaha.

 

*goes back to writing and plotting*

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I starting to turn into an offical reviewer. Adding in star ratings is just making it scary.

 

Anyone got any view of my use of those. Good, bad, nice addition?

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We would have liked to do more to put the In Crowd over, but that word limit's a muh-fucka (particularly considering the stip).

That's OK, you'll get yours in the Triple Quadruple Match, muahahahahaha.

 

*goes back to writing and plotting*

I would too, but it seems someone hasn't checked their PM box yet.

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I got nothing from Todd, Landon.

I guess this means I can slack like a mo fo for the PPV then :) Anyway, I think I finally got the right vibe from writing the House as a sort of latter day Hollywood Blondes 2.0 with Landon being all crazy and Brian Pillman-ish and Todd getting that old school Pre-Stone Cold Steve Austin personality. It sort of gells them together better in my mind since their styles have a mild issue in meshing together from a grinding Royal to a more-likely-to-go-back-and-forth Maddox. Only thing I would have liked for this would have more words to work with since it shortens down the heat segment and made the ending all rushed with very little post-match blah blah blah but Clark fixed that up right nicely. Yup.

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