AnnieEclectic 0 Report post Posted April 22, 2004 She looked at her mirror image. But it wasn't a mirror, it was her twin. Her sister. Supposedly identical but at this moment they were in different worlds. The sister known as Allison Onita sat in the sterile waiting room on the east wall, flipping through a People Magazine, reading about celebrities, the latest movies coming out... trivial nonsense. The sister known as Ann Onita sat at the west wall of the sterile waiting room, deciding to look back down at her Sporting News magazine. Competition, pure and simple, and the speculation of was all she ever needed to read. But she wasn't reading. Her built-in paranoia wasn't letting her relax. People would often stop the twins on the streets of Yokohama, politely asking about how it felt to be walking and skipping with someone exactly like you. The two young girls would be subject to rhetorical questions, asked to no one and not expecting answers from the targets. Do they do anything separatly? Can they hear what each other is thinking? How eerie, wouldn't it just creep you out to have to wake up with someone that looked exactly like you? It didn't used to be eerie for Ann Onita. She used to think that she knew what Allison is thinking. But she's sure that right now, they've never been more separate. "Why are we here?" asked Ann, pretending to be reading an article about the NFL Draft, "There's nothing wrong with me." "You may think there's nothing wrong," starts Allison, "But it's been obvious since your match with Insane Luchadore. You've been taking a lot of damage, especially to the head. I want to make sure that you're fine." Or sneak behind my back and tell Tom just how hurt I really am... thought Ann. Silence permeated the waiting room. Why? Why is she going away from me? Doesn't she know that she's all I have left? No friends... no lovers... no other family... She killed that thought immediatly. She couldn't remember the circumstances of her parent's deaths right now. "...Miss Onita?" Both sisters looked up as the nurse looked at both women in a confused manner. "Ann Onita?" she asked. Ann sighed, "That's me," she said as she put down her magazine and walked with the nurse towards the doctor's office. She didn't have to be here. She knew what was wrong. You don't thrive in the hardcore division without recognizing the signs. Headaches, dizzyness, nausea and sleep troubles all added up to one thing: a concussion. She sat down on the wax paper and let the doctor stare into her eyes, flashing lights and tapping parts of her head. She could probably have given herself the examination and come up with the same conclusion. "Well Ann, I won't sugarcoat it, you have a low-grade concussion," said Dr. Bloomer, "You should rest up for three to four days, take it easy... I wouldn't do any heavy exercise until Monday at least." "I know, doc. I know," said Ann, taking her belongings and walking out of the office. The nurses put away her file in the office as she walked by, opening the door and walking past her sister who was talking on her cell phone. "Ann? You okay? What was the diagnosis?" she asked, trying to get Ann to stop and turn to her. Ichiban just kept on walking. "You know damn fucking well what the diagnosis is. Go ahead and tell him, I know he's on the other end," said Ann. Ann slammed the door to the practice closed behind her, walking towards her Miata in the parking lot. Inside the building, Allison kept the phone to her ear but didn't say a word. "What was that?" asked the voice on the other side. "Uh, nothing... I don't think I can say anything right now. Look, I'll talk to you later," she said as she hastily folded the phone back up and threw it in her purse. Shit... she thought, how did she know? END Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
the.weej 0 Report post Posted April 22, 2004 Mm, gooey, peanut buttery build between two whole-weat slices of monologue. Good promo, sez I, although I think it puts the ultimate conclusion of what happens at Battleground further away from doubt. One thing interesting, though... Why? Why is she going away from me? Doesn't she know that she's all I have left? No friends... no lovers... no other family... ...is that. That's a fascinating part of the angle that hasn't been brought up until now, and adds a bit more of a jagged edge to everything. I think you should do a little more with this and explore Ann's mindset on the fact without her sister, there really is no-one else. The lone wolf is the lonely wolf, but this is one that's been surrounded by people almost her entire career. -Z Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
AnnieEclectic 0 Report post Posted April 22, 2004 Mm, gooey, peanut buttery build between two whole-weat slices of monologue. Good promo, sez I, although I think it puts the ultimate conclusion of what happens at Battleground further away from doubt. One thing interesting, though... Why? Why is she going away from me? Doesn't she know that she's all I have left? No friends... no lovers... no other family... ...is that. That's a fascinating part of the angle that hasn't been brought up until now, and adds a bit more of a jagged edge to everything. I think you should do a little more with this and explore Ann's mindset on the fact without her sister, there really is no-one else. The lone wolf is the lonely wolf, but this is one that's been surrounded by people almost her entire career. -Z whoa... good point. I hadn't thought of that actually, as I'm really trying to hammer in the paranoia taking hold in Ann's brain. She's a paranoid scared girl, folks, just remember that. Plus I couldn't think of another way to bring the concussion into play, the real reason for this promo -Annie Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Guest D. Lucretia Report post Posted April 22, 2004 Mmmm... drama. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Secret Agent 0 Report post Posted April 22, 2004 Oh, I like! I'm not sure I can say much more than what Z has already covered, but it adds an extra level to the Battleground match I feel. Good work, I was beginning to wonder if you had slipped away into obsecurity again. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Crowe 0 Report post Posted April 22, 2004 ... I'll be your friend, Annie. Jessica and I are always looking for a third... A nice development promo... Allison and Tom sitting in a tree... F-U-C-K-I-N-G! Muahaha, I am very interested in seeing how it all turns out. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Dace59 0 Report post Posted April 22, 2004 Mmm build up. And dealing with such issues. Another great promo from this angle. This ladder match is going to be hyped off the charts. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Toxxic 0 Report post Posted April 22, 2004 More great promo goodness... suppose i should wite one of my own, but i have this little thing called a match to deal with... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
